Slipping silently into my room
I slumber, Awaiting my doom
You see me as I lay
Spread across my bed, plain as day
You think it will be okay
They wont catch you, No, not today
Grasping my hands in your own
Afraid for my life, I am all alone
Covered by your hand, I cannot scream
Help me someone, Taking pleasure it would seem
Got to free myself from your grips
Tearing off my clothes, starting at my hips
Strangled, unable to breathe
Still not able to break free
Kisses, supposed to be passionate
Not forced by someone you’ve never met
Kicking and crying, you tear at my top
Trying to scream, begging you to stop
Getting no where, tiring I begin
To see you’ll obviously win
How many other women went through
What with me you are about to do
Given this broken state of mind
Is there a God, Give me a sign.
Spare me of this pain and sorrow
Deliver me so that I may live tomorrow
I’m sorry for all those who
Where also victimized by you
But at least give me a chance
Spare me this horrible circumstance
I swear if I am able to live
Conviction for all he’s done, I will give
Thinking to herself, will I live
Shedding these tears, knowing to forgive
He may be doing it all wrong
But he’ll be brought to justice before long
If given another chance
She’ll tell others of her happenstance
Though doubting she will see tomorrow
She drowns out her thoughts of sorrow
Ripping into her without care or remorse
Fate has been cruel in running its course
He did what he wanted to do
Finally its all over, Its through
She cried to herself in her bed
Hiding the shame in her head
She didn’t hate him, though many would
She forgave him just as she should.
Author notes
I never had to experience anything like this I only hear about it all around me from family members and close friends and it inspired me to write a poem about it...
*****Many of you might wonder why I put the last stanza, particularly the last line in the way I did. However, I know rape is wrong and its never alright, but my belief leads me to believe that though people do things that are not alright in any way, I was taught forgiveness. Even though I never personally experienced it myself, Its something that I am 100% positive that I would want to hate the person for what they did, but I also know that some people have little control over their actions, and that in life you should never hate a person only the wrong doing. That is where I came from with the last line in the last stanza.********
And as for form I don't know what form it is... (Relatively new to poetry)
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this was a powerful piece
indeed, I have been here and can also
reolate to the last of your lines
Although i am angered by what was done
to me, I also know my faith tells me
In order to find innerpeace i must forgive,
it took several several years
and thats one thing i am still working and getting
closer on everyday.
Thank you and best wishes
Passionspromise
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When "Rape" is the title of your poem, make it something like "the rape of..."
example: "the rape of cassandra" or whatever else.
Otherwise it's odious, and lies should smell of perfume.
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Wow
I really don't know what to say. This is a great poem. Beautifully written. I know a lot of people who have been through this so I guess in a sense this poems hit close to my heart. Its a great poem none the less.
ps--spelling errors
6th stanza, last line. "mea" should that be "me a"
9th stanza, 3rd line. "al" should the be "all"
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0h god, this is every girls worst nightmare...
its one of the scariest things in life. i like they way you have put it. but if you dont mind i would like to know wat prompted you to wrte the last stanza? is it really possible to forgive such an act. i am not saying you have gotten it wrong, i am just asking what came to your mind..
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Yes
I know its an odd twist to something not many people would agree with me on. However, I have never personally experienced such a thing but I have a faith and belief in God and my faith teaches to forgive people because you reap what you sew. I also believe that people who do things like that, like raping other people need help and when they do it they are sick and everyone even if they don't believe the same thing needs a second chance. Some people change. And some people can't help and control what they are doing sometimes. But to me if I were in the situation stated above, I would be scared and hurt and a million other things but I would still forgive him because I know its the right thing to do. If you don't forgive someone you wind up hating them and that can ruin some of the best times you can have in your life. Anyhow, enough of my babbling sorry.
Night Mistress 1
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For such a serious topic, I don't think the form was serious enough. It was too scattered, no flow, no meter, even though there was an attempt at it. Also, the perspective jumped around without a clue, so that was confusing. If you're going to write something on a serious topic then it needs to be focused.
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Im Sorry
That you feel that way about the poem. However, I myself have never experienced rape and have only heard of it from others around me. And from that I wrote this poem. Also even though you feel that way I must disagree with what you say in its entirty because the thing is it does flow, my mother who was a personal victim of rape read it and she said that she didnt want to read anymore because of what she went through and it depicted it so well. As well someone I had never met read it and said plain as day that while reading it said he could visualize the entire thing and it sent chills down his spine. I suppose it all depends on the reader but I will still thank you for reading it and for the constructive criticism.
Xoxoxoxo,
~Night Mistress 1~
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