Whispers of your devotion float across my heart,
warmth fills and devours every part of me.
Candlelight glows so radiantly from your eyes
triumphant for you have found your soulmate.
From somewhere deep within my soul cries out to you
as in humble admiration you become such a cherished part of me.
As we dance in the unity of love's completion
you grant me your heart and soul forever.
Waves of your desire crash into my shores of isolation
as the breezes of continuity catch these sails.
If only you knew how long my spirit has aimlessly wandered
searching for you, the one who completes me.
Yet little do you know of the fires within you have flamed
as your tenderness entwines itself around my heart
Author notes
Prompt-
"I feel wonderful because I see
The love light in your eyes.
And the wonder of it all
Is that you just don't realize how much I love you."
from an Eric Clapton song.
In a list
A contest entry
- Song Quote as Inspiration ~ Come check it out by StormGoddess.
450 points, ended September 26, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Today infact, I know for a fact I met my soul mate and married him 2/14/09 Wonderful flow of words, It was a pleasure to read.
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Wow
Wow. That's just about all I can say about this poem. It's amazing, and it gets the feeling across so perfectly. I hope I'll be able to write that well some day.
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So perfect
Whispers of your devotion float across my heart,
warmth fills and devours every part of me.
I loved these first 2 lines they were great.
If only you knew how long my spirit has aimlessly wandered
searching for you, the one who completes me
And the above two I had felt that way for so so long untill I found the lady that makes me whole.
These words are words I wish I could find, I wish i had read your poetry earlier because it is beautiful.
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hoodwinked
You have been hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits. I love this piece so very full of emotion and wonderfully written. I know that I am young still but I know what this feels like. I really love it. Great job and keep it up. I love this so much.
Never give up
Write from your heart
Kate
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Beautifully penned, soft and loving.
A great take on the prompt.
Thank you for entering and good luck
Storm -
This is such a wonderful continuation of the quote. You penned this so well. Thanks for sharing your heart with us. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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since you retired ,you are all aglow gaylene and it shows.good to dump the students eh ,smile good again xx p
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Wonderful
What a great take on the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
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What a wonderful prompt to work with,
and you have crafted a beautiful poem out of it,
lovely just lovely,
Love and Light
Frozentearz -
Sometimes I think I have found my soulmate and then days like today happen... you have reminded me all that I love about mine... and maybe I should call him and try to mend the broken bridges, beautiful hun
Karen
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