Silken
strands of golden hair~
swathe a pearl beyond
compare.
Author notes
Jake, my sun.
A contest entry
- Pay It Forward (10 words only) by Malabu ...Update..10/11..I will finish judging by weekends end..thanks for patience by Malabu.
450 points, ended October 15, 2007, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 75 Words Or Less (Short Poetry - Show Me What You've Got) by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended November 25, 2007, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 30 words or less/20 entries...Inspirational by mysticstorm.
600 points, ended February 3, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PRE WRITE QU ICK- IES by Luminescence.
300 points, ended March 14, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 1 Line, 1 hour...Go!!!...prewrites allowed (as long as criteria is met) by Timeless Wisdom.
750 points, ended November 17, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Okay..the way this piece is separated, it is technically two lines
but I will accept it, due to the fact that a little formatting can turn it into one line.
I liked this piece...and I like the fact that it rhymed. Nice job and thanks for your entry.
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I like the lenght.... I love short and consise poems,
also thank you for the author's note... lol otherwise I wouldn't have known what the poem was about and would have been confused.
Thank you for entering and good luck,
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What a beautiful and heartfelt tribute...I know this feeling so well for mine is as dear to me...thank you for sharing your love and beauty...
Best to you! -
Alex, this must be about your son. I have missed having you as a younger boyfriend! My, my what you can do in just a few words. I'm just now learning to write this way. Teaches us about using extraneous words. Best wishes from an old friend. shhhh. no name!
Shana
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Very nice tribute to Your Son, short but fluid, I like it, it takes talent to say so much with such few words.
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This one is so short, but so sweet. I'm sure if he read this he'd say the same for you (or I hope so anyway, because what you say for him is beautiful). Love at it's best, you truly do care.
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Wow this is a lovely tribute. I liked the hope here. This was a beautiful write.
Thanks for your comments.
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I love this. It has a wonderful rythm that plays in my head like a lovely chant. Uplifting and beautiful. Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest.
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Loved it- great imagery within such limited words
Wishing you all the best in the contest
Here I'll give the clappies
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oh very nice and very elegant this has great imagery for so few words
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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This had such a proud undertone. Your love of your son shines with the few words penned eloquently. Bravo
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aww this is a beauty,your sun in your eyes sparkles with such thrive, thanks for sharing him,and good luck in his contest...MM
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