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Breathe






Sipping serene catastrophes
  trailing around lines
    filters in grave fragrance.


















I breathe the residue
      in last atempt 
            of reviving you.









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Prompt: tea

A contest entry

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  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    September 23, 2007

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    Very emotional and deep with meaning. Great use of prompt. Thanks for sharing... x Love and light, Butterflydreams.

    • phoenixonfire
      September 24, 2007
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      Thanks Butterfly for the lovely comment and the silver trophy!!

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      pri
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  • cherche -d -ame
    September 23, 2007

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    At first I only saw the first stanza [as they are spaced so far apart] and I was unable to make any sense out of it...but then I saw the continuation and was touched by the sadness of it. It reminded me of trying to find comfort in that cup of tea after the breakup of a relationship , or even worse...the death of a loved one. Best wishes in the contest,
    reenie