My soul seems to be as dark as the clouds
and as cold as the waters
about as bright as the dull light
that stands at the end of the board walk
When I am feeling pain and stress
this is the place I come to for a long peaceful walk
to relax my mind
Just to sit on the edge and have a conversation
with the ocean
that doesn't talk back
But still gives the best advice
The sounds of the waves
helps to clear my thoughts
close my eyes and take a deep breath
intaking the fresh air
Just imagine problem free
Realize life is to much to bare
and never cracked up to be
what it's suppose to be
Vision my high hopes and dreams
When the eyes open strive to make it a reality scene
My heart aint as dark as I made it out to be
It can get brighter like the clouds when the sun begins to rise
My soul aint as cold as I made it out to be
It can get warmer like the wind when the sun begins to rise
I need to stop hiding like an eclipse
and come out of the shadow like when the beauty of the sun rise
And be proud of who I am and how much I love and
Thank God, smiling down at me from the heavens is an amazingly
beautiful sky of blues.
All by sitting and watching the day go by.
Author notes
Just some words I found within my heart ~~~
In a list
A contest entry
- Tranquil Moments by Ephiphany.
400 points, ended September 23, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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We all need a place of peace that we can go when we are feeling sad or stressed I love the way that this is written and portrayed!!! You did a beautiful job with this write!!!
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I know this much...you have certainly come out of the shadows and you are shining quite brightly
~Tia
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Outstanding -- Gold Quality
Excellent Writing. Uplifting and encouraging.
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this reminds me of the all night fishing trips i love to venture on and watch as the sun rises in the morning very nice write i loved it great flow keep up the nice work...
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This reminds me of my own house. It's positioned right in front of the sea and so it's always refreshing to sit outside in the balcony and let everything clear from your mind. You've described it erfectly here...
In fact, it teaches you a thing or two - even if much of it doesnt make sense, it leaves you with a feeling that you've gained something.
Never ♥
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Sweet. I love this poem.
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I really like how you brought your thoughts together in this piece. Just one thing - why the space between the sentences?
Anyway, I really like it. Great imagery and good descriptive thoughts.
Unfortunaly, you broke a rule, so I can't accept this! -
Very good
It can get brighter like the clouds when the sun begins to rise
My soul aint as cold as I made it out to be
It can get warmer like the wind when the sun begins to rise
I need to stop hiding like an eclipse
Wonderfull words of thought
Good thinking
Rick
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Hi Joyce,
As I read I was thinking, "Geez, I hope like heck she entered this in a contest. It's fantastic!" So you can imagine how thrilled I was when I got to the bottom and saw your Gold trophy!
I love the imagery in this piece. That and the train of thought you describe are incredibly inspirational. This is one of those uplifting poems I will come back to again and again - just to remind myself that things aren't usually as bad as they often seem.
Beautiful job, and congrats on that shiny trophy.
Much love,
~J.
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My friend, the ocean rescued me on my return from overseas, many days, late nights, i spent, alone with thopughts, at times something to read, but trying to heal heart and soul from the traumas.It cause me to relax internally, soothe my heart and mind, eased the anxieties.
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A beautiful writing about the soul and hope. I delight in reading this. I never read the features anyways. Poems like yours are truly gifted. There is laws of reciprocity about the substance of the soul. You can cut down the time and minimize the useless costs of other or another. A beautiful vulnerability in restoration of grace. Love these lines -
And be proud of who I am and how much I love and
Thank God, smiling down at me from the heavens is an amazingly beautiful sky of blues.
All by sitting and watching the day go by.
All the questioning is you will get there and better than you ever could have imagined always with authenticity. Love your pic.
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I love the idea of talking to the ocean, and the type of conversation you can have with it. This is really great, quite beautiful. Congrats on the gold.
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Hi Joyce,
congrads on your well deserved gold! This is exactly a tranquil moment. I always go to the water when in need of healing solitude, and just like this, I am reminded of my blessings.
This is just beautiful my friend and lovely pic as well.
much love and blessings,
Michelle
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Just words you found within
your heart, huh? Seems you have a beautiful soul then my friend, I absolutely Love this poem of tranquil moments by you. Very full of love and hope and imagery. Thanks, this is wonderful.
e
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Peace
I like the outdoors, but it's still so hot here! This place you write about sounds amazing though. Sometimes just sitting down to watch God's creation is a wonderful thing. We get so caught up in the day to day junk, that we forget such beauty is all around us. beautiful thoughts Sis. I love ya! Bubba
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These words that you found within your heart
are so beautiful and sweet. It's amazing how
nature although unable to speak our language,
can easily bring you to a state of tranquility.
It's almost like being hypnotized or falling
asleep and waking up in another place and time.
Every second that goes by, your heart sighs
feeling so contented.
I love these lines:
"Just to sit on the edge and have a conversation
with the ocean
that doesn't talk back
But still gives the best advice
The sounds of the waves
helps to clear my thoughts
close my eyes and take a deep breath
intaking the fresh air"
Beautiful work here my friend and all the best to you
with this one in the contest! Thanks a lot for sharing it and keep it up!
Jeremy0826
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