I ask myself why alot
but rarely get an answer
like why can't i be happier
but for some reason i cannot.
I tell myself when i get up in the morning
that today i will be happy just for you
something always goes wrong
and mostly there is nothing i can do.
I want to be the one to make you smile
when you have had a hard day
why can't i have that chance?
isn't there a way?
when the world seems like it's falling apart
i want to comfort you and put you at ease
why cant't i be your shoulder to cry on?
why can't i be there for you to please?
Author notes
just another different poem i thought of
i would like to be your AP sister
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Comments
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this is a sad thought, not really crying sad, but it is very good!
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Very open questioning in this piece, giving a good glimpse into personal thoughts and emotions.
I can relate very much to this.
Good write.
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I like the second and third stanzas. It should be "put you at ease" not "make you at ease" I don't like the first part, it seems forced to me. "Maybe that's not the way I was taught" is interesting, but doesn't really seem to fit the rest of the poem. Maybe if you elaborate on that? I think its good overall but might be made better with a little reworking.
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I really like this a poem of longing and hoping to make someone else happy and it has the element of truth that when you cant make others happy you start to ask yourself why this was great
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