Fear is knowing your going to die
Your lungs give out, you start to cry
Knowing the man is coming for you
Thinking franticly of what to do
Fear is hearing him come up the stairs
hear clanging and clicking
he has two knifes
in pairs
You shut your door in hope that he wont come in
Praying to God
Please don't let this Devil win
Fear is seeing his shadow under your door
Your hearts starts racing more and more
Wondering if I fight back I might
win this war
He pushes the door it creaks open
your under your bed waiting
for your lungs to reopen
Fear is Thinking you saw him leave
your heart slows down
Message received
Creeping out slowly from your
will to survive
Knowing but praying your still alive
Fear is not knowing that he's behind you
the hairs on the back of your neck not saying a word
the goosebumps you look for not giving you a clue
suddenly pain shoots up your body
you don't know why
right now wondering is your hobby
Fear is seeing the smile on his face
as he turns you around your head starts to race
Fear is knowing that he loved you once
he held you close
He'd die for you once
Fear is wondering what you did
what you closed
what you hid
Fear is feeling your eyes come to a close
Death is among you may he impose?
Questioning now?
do I even bother?
Fear is knowing the man
was your Father
Author notes
I picked (I) ^^
A contest entry
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got it off the top of my head lol^^
Comments
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This was a little too awkward for me. The flow wasn't consistant at all, and it messed me up a couple times reading through. The rhyme scheme wasn't at a constant either. I say, either rhyme or not, not both. But anyway, I though the ending was the best part. It was definitely unexpected, on my part at least.
Thank you for entering, and good luck
Jeanette*~ -
not bad
not bad at all i liked this poem a lot. keep up the good work . And thank you for entering my contest. -
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this is amazing, will have too add tomy favorites after the contest, love the idea throughout the poem an the ending jump right out at you, well done great write and good luck in the contest -freedom of soul-
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Awesome!!!
This is awesome, you portrayed fear extremely well, I loved it! Good luck in the contest! -
Twisted. The your in the first line is supposed to be you're.
Hm. I didn't like the way some of this flowed... parts were choppy and poorly rhymed. On the other hand some parts flowed quite well. -
wow this was amazing.i think you did a great job.
i think you could put more detail or make one from the fathers point of view as to why he killed her.
all in all you did a great job,thank you so much for entering and good luck!! -
Okay! Thanks to you horror story I'm now not going to be able to sleep tonight! Which I guess it should mean that you give yourself a pat on the back for that because the whole point was to scary people. Also love how you rhyme in this piece make it even more creepy.
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This is very anxiety-inspiring and sad, and while I do like this very much as a piece, it doesn't exactly fit the prompt. Now, if you added a twinge of rage at your betrayal at the end, that would be awesome. For the contest, I don't know, but in itself, this piece is superb!
Best of luck and thanks for entering! -
Well I wasn't expecting one like this in my contest but I enjoyed it nonetheless. It was really powerful and I can relate to it in a way..just not my father. Thanks for entering and good luck
Avec amour *~Krymsin Kyss~* -
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OMG.....I CAN'T TELL YOU how emotionally powerful and difficult this was to read. Just the sheer panick of it all and then the ending almost brought tears to my eyes. THis was amazing, AMAZING IN EVERY WAY POSSIBLE.....and the amount of emotion that was expressed was beyond comprehension. This was just AMAZING!
Unforunately, you did not link this to a rave in any way, shape or form ((which was required)) but this is still amazing (no, i'm not going to DQ you.....you're still in the contest; this is a difficult contest and i have great understanding for that).
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is so scary,and sad, amazing job thank you for sharing this poem...
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that's so horrible! Unfortunately, for many children in this fallen world, it's a true story. Still...shudders.
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Oh my God, I knew half way through that you were talking about a Father. This is so frightening and sad. As I read I felt my pulse speeding up and I myself got scared, for I felt this way once but it was my mother, I know this fear all to well, but I was just a child. Well done here, thank you for sharing this
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That is so messed up. Abuse is ridiculous and should be stopped. In this poem, you made me NOT stop reading... it sucked me in... feeling the fear pumping through my veins as the story unraveled.
Amazing job and good luck in the contest! -
Ahhhh. It is so scary but so good. I love it. I think this is amazing. THis is one of the best poems I have EVER read. It is just WOW> Omg, it is so good. I love it i love it. It is so good. The ending puts me in shock. It is so sad, but it strikes me. It is truly amazing. You did an amazing job. It's just like wow. THis is EXACLTY what i was looking for. I'm not gonna say good luck, cuz you don't need it. THis is one of my ALLTIME favorites. Excellent, amazing, beautiful, deep. WOW
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Oooh..
Great job!
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