I would tell you my soul is pure,
that my soul is white,
but that would be a lie
because there is no such thing as pure,
no such thing as white,
not anymore.
Any action, any move
and you taint yourself just a little more,
twist one way
and shadows of doubt enter,
blackness creeps in
tainting your angelic soul,
you become a little more human,
a little more mistaken.
White always reflects
onto something new,
merging the colors of the rainbow within,
mixing with it shades of black and grey,
and soon you’ll have every color known.
So if you're not pure
are you dirty?
blackened?
No,
you're human.
Author notes
Brittany Budzinski (hddninshdws)
The color is white
Prompt #2
A contest entry
- Colours by Beating.
300 points, ended October 8, 2007, 7 entries
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I loved what you had to say here about the color white. It is so true. Thanks.
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I'm going to have to disagree with you. It isn't just white in your poem, it's all colours. And I love that. Just one thing, in this line:
"So if your not pure"
It should be "you're" and not "your". You made the same error in the title. It should be "you're" there too.
Other than those error, I'm really blown away by this piece. It's truth and beauty is just amazing! -
Great
I like this as well! The best thing is that its something different, most of the poems in this contest (including mine) are all positive about their colours but this one is more specific...it describes the colour in so many creative ways! Great job, and good luck!!
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You tell it like it is-Human beings are not perfect and so they will never be. I loved the interplay of words here.
By the way many thanks for your kind comment-I have since corrected the spelling!!!
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Human, such a dirty word in itself, like bile, miasma or ichor (not the blood of gods, but the guts of bugs).
But I understand the point or two you are expressing in your observations and ponderings.
Almost as if you're whisphering "What is perfection?"
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oooohhhh, true, very true, and very powerfully written, held me to the very end, and that is often a very difficult thing to do, usually my mind starts to wander, when will i ge tot the next poem, but not so with this one. The truth. Very powerful, not white not pure...hmmm...interesting. I reawlly loved it great write. Good luck in the contest, best wishes
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