What
a sight
great delight
Billowing clouds
make me shout out loud
How beautiful the sky
Pleasure to my jaded eye
never still ever changing shape
Who can wonder why I gape and stare
At this abstract art that the Lord placed there
Author notes
Picture Prompt.
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF PICTURE PROMPT by penman.
525 points, ended September 23, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Got an HM You Think Deserves Better? by Paloszoo.
900 points, ended April 9, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - H.M. Trophies Only #2 by AliceinPoetryLand.
600 points, ended May 9, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautifully penned and I love the light and airy flow this has to it.
A fine Etheree.
Thank you so much for your entry
Gaylene
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Hi. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck! I’ve decided to use a slightly edited version of my friend Arkbear’s grading scoreboard to help me judge this contest. I hope he doesn’t mind. It’ll aid me in organizing my thoughts and judging fairly versus randomly. I hope you enjoy it and find it helpful. Writers with the highest possible points out of 80 will obviously win
Title Appeal: 9.5 – Lovely title, very befitting for the poem. I would probably click on this to read more about it.
Poem Flow: 8 – Lack of punctuation made this read somewhat choppy. I didn’t know where to stop/slowdown and start up again, so I ended up reading it rather quickly.
Depth: 9.25 – Pretty good impact and power with you delightful words.
Emotional Impact: 8 – I just didn’t feel much emotion with this piece, though it shows that you did, so nicely done there!
Spelling and Grammar: 10 – Great job!
Punctuation and Caps: 5 – No punctuation at all - Made for a difficult read! And caps were placed in spots I wouldn’t have placed them. Not sure how you made your decision to place them where you did.
Presentation: 8.75 – Etherees are one of my favorite forms. Your aesthetics are off a bit. Your lines should be straight at the end, lining up diagonally instead of jagged.
Personal Appeal: 9.25 – Liked the content. It was very spiritual. Nice!
My score: 69.00/80.00
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thank you for entering! this is a very pretty poem, and very unique! you did a great job! and good luck in the contest!
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Exactly! THat is exactly how I feel! I always look at the sky, at the clouds and just wonder...wonder at how every day, and every hour there is a different painting way up there. It's amazing, I love the clouds and I love how your poem put so perfectly how I feel! Great write!
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nice write i love these lines....
"Who can wonder why I gape and stare
At this abstract art that the Lord placed there"
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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