In your eternal eyes
Forever it is spoken,
A love so pure,
A mended heart unbroken
Fire consumes the damage within
Her love is thus unspoken
Giving the breath of life
For the bent and broken
For which heartache has no end.
Falling steadily from grace
Seeing you,
Love’s new face
Fire pulsing into a love unknown
Completely bursting,
Her face is shown.
Loving as his heart races after,
Hear in this world,
Forever in laughter
A contest entry
- From Out-looks on Life TO ANYTHING!!! by BXs Finest.
450 points, ended October 23, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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900 points, ended January 12, 34 entries
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Comments
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unspoken....broken....spoken...i think you used these words a little too much in the beinning of the poem. but overall i liked it. thanks for entering.
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Nicely written
You've woven a weave of tangled love vines
and twisted them into flowers. Your words write a royal purple grape and although smashed under the foot of denial you turn into a fine wine.
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THIS IS AMAZING! i relate to it, in so many ways, "Fire consumes the damage within" is amazing imagery! :
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Ah..what a depth and what a beauty you have poured in every word of this verse bring the scenario of love...well done..and thanks for sharing such a wonderful write...
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I put this isn for spotluck..good luck cuz...I love you...I seee you finally got a gold trophie...way to go...love you
Lauren -
WOW!
This is your best piece (for now... coz i've read only like some but so far this is the bomb
) Your emotions were so raw and pure and it was breath taking! 
The metaphors were great, painted brilliant pictures and it was all about love! gosh... i loved this!!! keep writing kays!!! Wonderful piece!
~Ranji
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Good write here
Good form and a true statement indeed
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life ain't perfect but it's wonderful isn't it...lol...very well written, I love it Love is sucha powerful thing it mends scars that you weren't even aware you had.
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This is a powerful write of love, life and hope. You bring these elements together and speak to the essential needs of the heart. Well Done!
Niaish for sharing this thoughtful work.
Gray Elk
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Times of Change
we are all touched by love one way or the other. Falling in it or stumbling through it and running from it but to find the one true that will accept all that we do to hold you more dear than life itself can never be caught only found. A great write you have written for the joy of love.
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Heartache definately has no end it seems if it's not one thing its always over another. This was a lovely write i enjoyed it niaish for sharing
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I love it!DDDDD
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Hey nate guess what Finally made my account....give you another comment on this one seeing as of how it's on of your best...as you know I love it...and I don't see why you don't have more comments on it...lmao...but yeah as I've said it's beutiful, and breathtaking....love you cuz
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A poem filled with love and caring that brings the joy of life to ones soul. A lovely poem with lovely imagery. This one brought a happy smile. Always nice to read a happy love poem. Too many sad ones on here to read. A beautiful poem and a pleasure to read.You take care, Sandy
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Niaish Ma eno from all your Children, a beautiful write of love you have here for one much cherished - hope they have read this, kindest thoughts and wishes, Anna-Marie
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An Ebb and Flow of Emotion
that tugs at the heart with cords of love for another. Niaish for sharing, this offering with us in the group.
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forgot the clappies
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tender, beautiful, and breathtaking, blessings always~ Trisha
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Tenderness wrapped up through these words of love! A beautiful creation of images and feelings together! Wonderful writing.
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I am amazed at the amount of guys out there who know how to write words of love. How wonderful to receive a poem such as this. Beautiful words and Niaish for sharing with us
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Such amazing love within this beautiful and heartfelt write. I could feel all your love for this person. Niaish for sharing my friend
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A lovely piece that allows the reader to be carried away on its tide. Feelings and imagery very present.. Well written...mal
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A beautiful story of devoted love. Well written with much emotion.
Soulful Woman
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Good
This is a great poem and I felt the emotions swimming throughout it. The author uses good imagery and maintains a poetic flow through the whole piece. The poem has a message and delivers it well. Nice flow of words and a pleasant sounding poem.
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I have already read this master piece but it deserves a second go round
Niaish my Brave Bear
Niaish also for entering
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Great job on this piece. Beautifully written. Congratulations on the honorable mention!
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the rhyme scheme is a bit different than I'm used to and I really enjoyed it. I read it a couple of times to get the feel. Nice job.
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This is an amazing poem. You did a wonderful job with this my friend. God bless you in everything you do and write, and congratulations to winning Honorable Mention in the first contest and best of luck to you and your poem in the second. Keep up the excellent work.
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This is beautiful, you write such heartfelt words. a love like this is priceless as I am sure Ashtyn is priceless to you . great job my friend
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BREATH TAKING
Such pure words of love...Falling steadily from grace Seeing you, Love's new face...Fire pulsing into a love unknown Completely bursting Her face is shown...sighs...A young Master Poet has arisen
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omg i like this one lol this one is GREAT you did good
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I like this, you have done a great job in this piece.....
Good flow, the rhyme is awesome, and a truly enjoable read.....
Thank you for sharing with me on this site.....
Be blessed with love and light always.....
AngelicMistress...Tanya
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Aww...I like this! Love is full of grace, and fills the heart with joy. We think we don't always deserve it, but you know, we'd be nothing without it, and it would have no expression without us! It is the breath of life, and romance is sweet, too ~ Karen
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Nice job. The group turned me on to you ... glad it did.
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What a truly beautiful piece of poetry!
You have an obviously loving heart and it shows wonderfully within the lines of this poem
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Awesome!!!
Very well written, nice flow; I especially love these lines:
"In your eternal eyes
Forever it is spoken,"
~ and ~
"Loving as his heart races after,
Hear in this world,
Forever in laughter"
Keep up the great work!!!
Peace, Cyn
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It's different from what I'm used to reading from you, but I still enjoyed it. It was good. (why are you still standing over my shoulder!!! You know you aren't supposed to read comments until you get to your profile!!!)
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I really like this. You did a good job on this one.
I'm sorry, I want to say more, but I'm not feeling so well.
Body trembling,
Hope forsaken by time,
And all that does destroy,
Damn my tendancy to rhyme!
Anyway, I didn't mean to write that, but you cn see what I mean.
Sorry.
Anyway, damn good job, my frien.
Well done.
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