Posture of elegance, through life
Beckoning gaze, becomes my vice
No more in life that I can see
This I want, what I want to be
Come hither pose, so dotingly
Image of splendor, copiously
Lavish pleasure, you are to me
This I want, what I want to be
Maternal prowess, supple view
Sensual dominance eschew
Lucid feminine subtleties
This I want, what I want to be
Populist gestures, seen from her
Beautiful heartfelt, love that stirs
Of her I worship for all to see
This I want, what I want to be
Author notes
Forms are cool when you force an image into them.
A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines),
and each quatrain contains a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last
line of each stanza). Each line within the poem consists of only eight syllables. There is no limit
to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum.
In a list
A contest entry
- Envy Of The Opposite Sex by philip16.
300 points, ended October 2, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful
This is a very beautiful poem, I see that I missed alot of your poems,this poems seems like a man seeing the love of his life for the first time, knowing she is the one, love at first sight, how she fits perfectly into all of what he wants, excellent write, let me know if I am wrong about the poem for I could be, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Beautifully Sensual
Oh I do love a Kyrielle. It is one of my favorite forms and you have truly done justice to it. Truly a pleasure to read and enjoy. ~Pamela
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Thank you Pamela - this was a different way of expressing the prompt in the contest. I do love Kyrielle as well. Thanks. Mykey
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Excellent!
This was very good my friend, Written well to the form that you described!
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I've been traveling so forgive me if I didn't comment. Thank you so much. I love writing in form
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what a beautiful form, kyrielle, I'll have to try.
You have such a way with words. This poem made my stomach drop. Its absolutely eloquent . The piece doesn’t leave you craving clarity , always a plus ! Good luck in the contest , of all the entree's I think yours takes the cake ! And if you don't . I find the judge to be incompetent. this had form and metor and natural beauty . good lord this was amazing . truly !
Keep penning !!!
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beautiful
lovely and tasteful sensual imagery... soft, like a silhouette!
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This is a very sensual and wonderful kyrielle that you have penned here. You captured the essence of the picture and although I haven't read the contest, just looking at the title of it, it sounds perfect for this one. Excellent verbiage combined with superb rhythm and rhyme had this one flowing off the the page to my heart immediately. You always show such a sensitive side of you with the words you pen and it is amazing. I want to thank you once again for what you share and wish you the best in this contest. It sounds golden to me. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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Thank you my friend - its about Gender envy. I was hoping to portray admiration and envy. Hope it worked Mikeee
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