Pressing onward
through unbreathable
crystallized air
- feeling in
most limbs
long disappeared
Lower digits
blackened, inside
thick snowboots
- gangrenous concerns
pushed to back
of numbed
consciousness
Team-spirit
the driving force
- the team
unfortunately
reduced by one -
interred in icy grave
with scant
frost-hurried
ceremony
Ultimate destination
still several
hundred miles away
but driven, like this
unrelenting snow,
forced by Arctic winds
into reluctant,
pneumonic lungs,
they trudge
northward
Thoughts of home
- wives, children,
parents, friends -
pushed to backs of
tired, demented minds
focussed on the quest
to forge claim to
a barren wilderness
- for a country
and a world
who could care less..
Author notes
Misdirected courage has always saddened me.
Prompt: There's a cold wind blowing
In a list
A contest entry
- Kinda Sorta Quickie: "Moraine" & "Pogonip" by ellipsist.
600 points, ended September 23, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - WINTER by Rhythm Child.
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Nice poem.
Thanks for the entry and good luck! -
Very deep within thought and much to ponder within the wording and meaning. brrr truly there is a cold wind blowing within your words.
Thanks for joining in,
Warm thoughts.
Frozentearz -
thankyou for entering. I hope you enjoy the contest and have fun.
take care
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Rhythm Child
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I'll just stay inside thank you Burrrr LOL nice ice words.
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PJ, your AN interested me, I agree, misdirected courage is perhaps when it serves only the cause of the self.
Especially liked "gangrenous concerns" and "frost hurried ceremony"
You paint the bleakness of the reality in the frozen wastelands as these men march across frozen tundra chased by chills yet not chastened by them.
Congratulations on the shiny for the shelf and thankyou for your much welcomed comments on my poem.
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I so hear you on this. I think you expressed the idea of misdirected courage very well. Of all the things in this world that really need one's unfailing time and energy and courage, I struggle to understand the willingness to risk robbing one's family of your return.
Well written!
Congratulations on the Gold.
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Love the picture! The was an excellent read. thank you for joining my contest. Good luck
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What a great write... I loved it...
Thats the story of what makes us all...
Your friend in Poetry... JackReed3
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Oh, I could not agree with you author note more...why they do this I'll never understand. The imagery is awesome. You've depicted the both mental and physical pain very well.
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I can see why....
very poignantly conveyed... a piece that expresses and inspires sadness...
thank you for sharing this wonderful entry...
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I like this alot
never read anything of yours...but what i see here...is and excellent write...well imaged and breathes your talent...effortless...Great write...well said and expressed to delight my thoughts
Mal
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