Inert gases
tout tawdry
titillations
Illuminate
paved paths
to hellish
haunts
Bad intentions
in sin soaked
stagnant pond
Lurid
Las Vegas
invitations
dazzle -
guzzle,
gamble
drink,
debauch...
illicit felicity,
fun and frolic
unfurled in
neon netherworld
~~~
Disenchanted
denizen
forges Ford
forward
- final glance
at pallid promises -
- Gomorrah glows
gaudy still
Firefly flits,
points pathway
to reality,
to civilized
enlightenment
In rear-view
mirror
Babylon
burnishes
fainter,
ever
fainter
Along with
it's
delusive
dreams
A contest entry
- Errant Panther's Amazing Race .... Round 3 by Errant Panther.
300 points, ended October 9, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Cityscape - Las Vegas by cirque du soleil.
375 points, ended November 16, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
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I loveee this!!
Wonderful imagery!, and i have to agree, the eight stanza is definitely the best!!
beautiful picture, too!
thank you for sharing! -
The imagery presented within this one is of a level of
making the reader think and see through your words,
Thanks for joining us in this round,
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
the 8th stanza
is amazing... breath taking... love this piece... the flow, the alliteration... the comparisons...
very vivid imagery.... it inspires the reader to visualize the picture you've included...
wonderful! very rich and filled with poetic elements!
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Grammar excellent,alliteration so rich that the reader had to read this aloud.You do not need to add pictures to your poetry.Pure poetry paints the picture and your poetry does that.Title apt.This lesser poet may have instead written "debauchery, it illicts felicity..."
A read worthy of the time taken and the pleasure afforded.
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Nice alliteration (and you are commending me!) The imagery in this is ah so naturale! Wonderful to the lips and eyes, I like your title better
Anyone great job! You certainly have one up on me.
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