My aching heart is lost.
My only desire is to get back to you.
Empty and alone in my world and
utterly consumed in despair
wihout you.
A contest entry
- Missing / Longing in 5 lines! by Beating.
600 points, ended October 8, 2007, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Favourite. by wonderbandalice.
455 points, ended October 12, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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indeed losing the one you love, can make you feel so lost...enjoyed reading this one, thank you for sharing, best to you in the contest....~blessings~
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The first word in the last verse is spelled wrong, and I think this could have been a lot better, had you continued with it.
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aww indeed losing the one you love, by any ways...is hertbreaking and full of pain... this piece has me
yet penned beautifully i can feel the desperation the want..*sigh* hurry come backl to me feel to it.
great job and best wishes to you -
we really do seem lost, and the world seem without sense when we are without our lover. I like how you say you're consumed in despair. I definitely know that feeling. Great job!
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wow i love it
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Wowzer
Wow, what an impact and in so few words! Fantastic write, good luck! -
I have no idea how you can say so much with so few words I would take 8/9 four line stanzas to cover it. An excellent little piece Good luck in the contest
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Sad and lonely I hear you clearly! Great take on the prompt!
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You have really captured the longing in such few words. Nice write, good luck in the contest.
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whisper
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