listen to my words--
seduction at its best?
watch my lips.
believe as follows.
lies? not to you, sweetheart.
lie to me all you want.
be yourself.and only yourself
i'm right here, holding your hand.
myself? oh hun, you're cute.
pardon my remark. it slipped.
almost as subconsciencely as
my heart slipped into your hands.
you don't even care.
yesterday.today.tomorrow.now.
how quickly your thoughts of me
are altered due to my dirtylittlesecret.
i thought i could trust you.
i'd like to tell you.you wouldn't listen.
spare the advice,think outside perfection.
you think you have me figured out right.
you have no idea what i think.
can you relate?
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Wow this is one of the best poems I have read everything sounds great I really likew these lines
lie to me all you want.
be yourself.and only yourself
i'm right here, holding your hand.
myself?
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very stream of conscious sounding, and conversational, it works for the poem.
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I like this. It has that sort've...bitchy feeling to it, pushing the world away. But its not written like that, its written more with more depth and sarcasm and personality. I think thats why I like this the most because I can feel your angry voice inside your bottled up words. This poem just feels like it wants to explode and scream.
I can totally relate to this. I always feel im hiding inside, that people dont know who I really am because they dont know what im not telling them, what I cant tell them. It makes me feel horrible but it makes me feel like the world just cant get to me.
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I like this. It has that sort've...bitchy feeling to it, pushing the world away. But its not written like that, its written more with more depth and sarcasm and personality. I think thats why I like this the most because I can feel your angry voice inside your bottled up words. This poem just feels like it wants to explode and scream.
I can totally relate to this. I always feel im hiding inside, that people dont know who I really am because they dont know what im not telling them, what I cant tell them. It makes me feel horrible but it makes me feel like the world just cant get to me.
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Amazing this is a... IDK but it is a beautifuly depressing poem. i like the line you have no idea what I think
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Wow so intense and true in so many cases I like the line "it slipped almost as subconcieously as my heart slipped into your hands"
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I am curious as to what this is about... is it about you, Beccah? If so... can I know about it? Or is it too personal? Beautifully written, though! You are so talented at writing poetry! Makes me jealous! -lol- I luv you!!!
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