You've hurt me.
More than words can describe.
I finally found the truth.
I can see through your lies.
The pain is making me cry,
from my heart not my eyes.
For my eyes are where you look
when trying to read my book.
The one place you won't get to again
is where I keep my feelings stored.
Even though my heart shatters further,
at least you can't read me anymore.
I've dug deeper into your truth,
more pain rushing into me,
the ground is where I rest my knee.
My breath becomes a pant,
as my heart races along.
The jackhammer over the shattered peices
has been turned on.
I'm dying,
I'm crying,
from the eyes this time around.
More emotions than I planned are being written down.
At least you're not here,
to read me now.
If you were,
you'd see the story of my death.
How my soul is washing away
with the broken peices of my heart.
Now that it's over,
Devin is gone.
Only a body is here.
This thing now in control,
had previously been withdrawn.
What this thing'll do,
I cannot say.
Whether he'll tell the truth,
or go his own way.
You robbed my love,
like some would a bank vault.
I hope you enjoy this new guy's stay
because all this
is your fault.
A contest entry
- Giving Up On That Thing Called Love by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended October 2, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PREWRITE CONTEST>>>>BREAK_UPS by PersuingHappyness.
400 points, ended November 2, 2007, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for entering into my contest but I feel that the rhyme was too forced I have trouble with rhyming poems.... like I said thank you for entering thoug
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I can feel your pain, trust me (thus the contest). About being glad he can't see your pain and what if he was there, he'd be able to see your heart dying? That's exactly how I feel too. It's dreadful, isn't it? I hope things become easier for you with time. Love is so very hard indeed and definately not fair.
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this was piercing here to read i think you
did a very great excellent job on expressing plainly who fault it is jewels -
Very awesome. It flows smoothly from line to line and stanza to stanza. I love the words and diction behind each one. Great write!
Thanks for sharing,
Silvos.
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great
awesome write Blaze.. gave me goosebumps...
love it. i hope things get better for you..
Rachy xoxo
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Good write Blaze. Matters of the heart is always a tough thing to deal with. I hope all is better for you though.
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wow...
this was really deep...and sad...
But I loved this...
it was really great, I love the whole thing...I can't pick out a stanza...but the line:
"The jackhammer over the shattered peices
has been turned on."
was really, really brilliant. great write.
-Jenn
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