Sitting at the table.
Now feeding the cat.
Tap, tap, tapping a pencil.
Waiting for your return:
An unsure event.
A contest entry
- Missing / Longing in 5 lines! by Beating.
600 points, ended October 8, 2007, 34 entries
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oh this is sad...waiting..i have no paitence at all i probably already had strung the cat out and busted the moment with Games oof battle lol
well done here
Tory -
as the others said, amazing wording. It's truly perfect, because every word adds to a deeper meaning. I loeve the last two lines, saying of the unsure event. What will happen? Great job!
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I agree, clever wording. Will they/won't they. Fab! Good luck in the contest!
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The last line is very clever, seemingly so normal but them bam, they may not come. Good luck in the contest.
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whisper
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i like how this poem has been structured. The short lines and the punctuation conveys the mood of the poem. This is a very effective write.
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