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Hush

As the night falls

graced upon my face

tempted to peek

inside this sealed case

my temptations of which I will embrace

so I bend down to tie my shoelace

there layed the corpse

of a woman known as Grace

She's been missing

for sometime from this place

always been a figment

we thought

wrapped in dark clothing

every home she would taunt

when I tried to run for help

she grabbed my hand

and sucked my breath

placed inside of her wooden shelf

now I am a zombie

because I couldn't resist myself

 

Halloween Extravaganza

Contest Prize Award by LittleFeather Cherokee:

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AP First Annual Halloween Contest

by Little FeatherCherokee

 

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    October 31, 2007

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    Thanks for your entry

    Oooohhh, the first zombie poem I have read so far. Cool, something a little different, never be tempted and stoop to tie a shoelace, many a good people been caught with their arse in the air from that one

    Happy Halloween!
    Tammy


    • Ephiphany
      November 4, 2007
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      Thanks for the award

      didn't notice this until now


      • Little Eagle Greeters member
        November 4, 2007
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        No problem

        I hope you like it. I thought it would be a nice little extra somthing for everyone.


  • Poetry and I Inc
    October 21, 2007

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    Oh this was good sis! I loved that line about her name being Grace. Good luck in the winning! -Inc."

    • Ephiphany
      October 21, 2007
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      Thank you....I tried, not really a Dark or Halloween writer


  • Silly Rabbit.
    October 7, 2007

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    Chilling and spooky. A great Halloween poem for all to read. I love the rhyming used here and the style. Keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 7, 2007
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    First impression? Fab, 2nd, superb! Well penned, best of luck in the contest!

    • Ephiphany
      October 7, 2007
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      Thank you

      I appreciate your honesty in this. I really do

      ephiphany


  • Mrs LadyEnthralling
    September 24, 2007

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    this was zesty baby i loved it but this isnt my piff dear its you but its missing something o my writers block is a wicked disease but its still strong enough to fight through the contest and that is the truth i just know your worth
    i love you muah...


    • Ephiphany
      September 25, 2007
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      Thank you love

      yeah I was suffering from a touch of writer's block, but this was an invite and you know I love to support our ppl.
      Thanks you do know me, huh? Glad you stopped by.


      e


  • Levesta
    September 24, 2007
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    ok you write dark also i guess you're what i call one true poet. i love it


    • Ephiphany
      September 24, 2007
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      Thanks Levesta

      this was my first dark write, an invite for a Halloween contest, it was fun to try something differnt

      Thanks again

      e


  • Swan song gold member
    September 24, 2007

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    I like this again hard rhyme creates a good meter throughout the poem. This has been the trademark of all your poems and if one reads them aloud they are a joy to read


    • Ephiphany
      September 24, 2007
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      Thank you jeff

      wow, I feel honored for you to have read this.
      My first dark write, it was fun if I must say.

      e


  • HaleyMary
    September 22, 2007

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    lol. Great, dark write, Sis. Fantastic imagery in this piece and it really seemed to be suspenseful throughout the poem. The ending was great. It made me think of how Halloween can be so much fun because it's like the day, or night rather, of the dead. Good luck in the contest.


    • Ephiphany
      September 23, 2007
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      lol

      thanks sis, Im really not good at writing dark, but I tried and it was kinda fun. Thanks for the comment.

      e


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    September 22, 2007

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    LOL great work sis. best of luck in this halloween contest, sounds fun.

    tasha

    • Ephiphany
      September 23, 2007
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      Thanks lil sis

      it was indeed fun to participate in such a big extravaganza.

      e

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