Ride the strip in a red Jaguar,
rum and coke at the local bar.
Lottery tickets, money to burn,
Lazyboy, Oreos, As the World Turns.
Cruise cheap thrills on the internet,
rip off the patch, smoke one more cigarette.
Slice your skin, release the pain;
Christ crucified; bore mankind's shame.
Choose your crutch carefully.
"Lean on me" is His plea.
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- Spiritual Poems by MoonsShadow.
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This is such a powerful and meaningful poem, even with so few words. So many people turn to the wrong things in their times of need or trouble, rather than searching for God to soothe them. It really brought certain people to mind, for me.
Thank you for sharing, and God bless. Beautiful write!
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I think most of us turn to habits or addictions of some sort to soothe ourselves. This poem is as much for me as anybody.
Thanks for your comment!
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Well,
Took a few reads to sink in, but finally captured, I think, the essence of the poem. Well penned! You really can do a lot with very few words!
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My mottos on poetry:
Show, don't tell.
Less is more.
Thanks for your comments!
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sorry, I was gonna give you a clappy guy and forgot, so here
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I like this, and thanks for entering my contest. If your 50 point entry fee is in within 24 hours I'll tack it onto the gold prize, and if you don't have the points in that ammount of time, your poem will be removed, but you can enter again, so long as you can put up the 50 point bid
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Ok, got the bid, you're in!
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Such a powerful poem here, each line is filled with impact. Nice choices of scenarios also. The background is very crisp and clean looking and I can see could be for many different writes. Nice work on both! Thank you for the entry and best wishes in the contest
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Thank you Dove! I'm glad you like this, especially the poem.
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Beautiful Border. It is true so many crutches for people to lean on. Great message, Good luck in the contest.
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excellent write sister! what a great message you share in these lines - lean on Him, no matter what you do or have done, you will be forgiven. Jesus Christ is the only "crutch" i need. thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always
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well
I must say this is one very direct piece of writing. I do love the powerand honesty ofit. That crutch, especially in todays world, seems to be so common. Bravo to you
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Wanted to say I love your author page - great graphics and pictures you have on this page. What a great message you share in these lines - lean on Him, no matter what you do or have done, you will be forgiven.
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WOW! This was very short but hit the point perfectly, good write!
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The cross of Christ is all we need. No addictive crutch can come close to the peace and happiness we find in Him.
Well done dear friend. I love the background too!
- joanne
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Interesting way
Of saying, at least as I see it, that we take for granted the easy life we can have without ever appreciating it. Please correct me if I am wrong -
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Each line describes an everyday sort of "crutch" we come to rely on to live within our skin, not always an addiction but a ritual that can be addictive, and yet not fulfilling. The final 2 lines refer to the "cross" as the "best" crutch, that we rely on Jesus primarily to keep us sane and on the right path.
Thanks for reading and commenting.
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My Mom – God rest her – would say “People today
have no shame.” Heaven help me, I’d take the
lottery tickets and the Oreos myself.
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This poem revealed so much about our society and how we use anything and everything to lean on...except Jesus the Christ! But patiently He waits...still
Excellent portrayal of how much we should depend on God instead of things of this world!
GBY
SilverButterfly
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Interesting point of view...The cross of Christ, took all our shame... To take and use the Crutch and to use the others to take our shame? The other way could be to think before we make it, to find the faith in our hearts and not to blame somebody other for our own mistakes. I call it "the run away of responsibilities". A great theme to ponder about it. This is the perfect way to show your personal sarcasm about it and your poem has a great end. This is a bit different spiritual poem that I am used to read. Good luck.
~Sonja~
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They can all be used as crutches, choices of ways to cope or feel better, what we choice to "lean on" Some can be addictions.
The cross of Christ ios another choice, to lean on God's mercy and Grace as we walk His path.
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"Lean on Me is His plea" very popwerful. Yet, if that His plea, then why don't we answer by cassting all our cares and troubles on HIm? We can't we be submissive to His Will and die to our flesh instead of being rebellious and hard-headed? Man! That bugs me so much sometimes! Why us humans gotta have the last Word?!(Well, in retrospect we don't, HE does but we feel like we need to). I wonder why is that?
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this is so distinct in your words,very nicely posted as he the Lord our commander of hearts,deeply appreciates,thanks for entering and good luck..mm
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Great title. Can apply to the first part of the poem, the crutches we easily select, or to the second part, with Christ as the sure crutch for all cripples and every infirmity. We can completely rely on and make progress with His aid, direction and strength. Very nice.
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Jesus and his cross is one of the options we can choose to lean on, or we can find our own way of coping with life, our own "crutch".
You may recognize the theme from another piece of mine. I wanted to try it again, without syllable constraints.
Thanks for your thoughtful comment!
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