Still sipping that same weak coffee
in that unknown cafe
same nights and days
nothing's changed too much
it's just a new phase
and the moon's wearing a new face
everyday
Roads still fight on crossroads
there's a parting of ways again.
Same old rusting trains, same old delays.
And in between the delays,
was a chance to sneak in
a few more parting words.
Not anymore. Not anymore.
You leave without a goodbye.
But I know
it's just a new phase.
On my tongue, still lingers
the taste of defeat.
I'm too used to victory
Too tired of being chased.
The horizon collapses on my shoulder,
the sun's left no trace
that it was ever there.
Maybe it wasn't. Maybe it wasn't.
Maybe the horizon was empty.
Maybe this isn't
a new phase
A contest entry
- Lyrics: Inspire Me by localhero.
650 points, ended October 29, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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the harsh onset of reality, some changes are permanent. I really liked all of the pseudo-rhymes, they work so well in lyrics. all of the imagery allows the reader/listener to experience the story you're telling. The diction is simple enough for the common person, but not boring and cliche either. I'm not totally sure what i would do musically, nothing jumnps out at me in particular, the themes are pretty universal and the lines don't have an inherent rhythm that i could pick up.... probably best suited for an accoustic guitar-driven sound... idk.
this is really nice work, thanks for entering.
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