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I知 a Fire Truck

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I知 a Fire Truck

I知 a fire truck, don稚 you see
I put out fires every day
Everyone wants to ride on me
So come on kids hop on and play

I put out fires every day
Turn on the siren, go real fast
So come on kids hop on and play
Jump on me and we値l have a blast

Turn on the siren, go real fast
I知 painted red for girls and boys
Jump on me and we値l have a blast
I am the best of all the toys

I値l let you drive and wear a hat
I知 painted red for girls and boys
I値l even hold your kitty cat
I am the best of all the toys

I知 painted red for girls and boys
Everyone wants to ride on me
I am the best of all the toys
I知 a fire truck, don稚 you see

 

 

 

Author notes

Pantoum Poetry
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:

Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4

Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8

Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanza then repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.

Last stanza:

Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza

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  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    October 9, 2007

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    Hey there!!

    I read this to my daughter and she clapped her hands and asked to hear it again... and again...

    You have a great talent!!!


    • Amera gold member
      October 9, 2007
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      This is one of the best comments I have ever received. You made my day; thank you for sharing your little girl’s reaction.

      Love,
      Amera♥


  • MargaretG
    October 8, 2007

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    This is a very cute poem, and the pantoum form is cleverly done. Repetition and rhyme work wonderfully in children's poems, they are enchanted by them, as indeed I was by this fine example. Congratulations on the trophy!


  • anaisnais
    September 30, 2007

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    Hey Amera, I like this stye, it works very well for childrens style poetry I see. Think you chose very wisely there. Think even a young child could try this with guidance!Lovely example of a write!


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    September 28, 2007

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    Hi Amera

    Wow I have never heard of or read a Pantoum poem before but I very much liked this write

    Very sweet. This should be in a childrens book
    Thank you for your entry
    BEST of luck in the contest
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda


  • Desire gold member
    September 24, 2007

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    Precious!!

    Now this is one Precious piece You have penned
    The kitty looks like he has modeled before
    Just beyond Precious!!
    Magnificent form chosen and done so flawlessly


    Loved this Beautiful!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Swan song gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    The form is excellent as always. I enjoyed this write
    it is humourus and yet you bring life to the object.
    It conveys a feeling of pride. I like that.


  • And Hyetal
    September 23, 2007

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    A really cute poem!!!

    I created a new poetry form (a sister of the Lupus Luna) that's quite a lot like this one. Time for some revision.

    Another definate contest winner! Keep up the amazing work!!! ^^


  • Hetha gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    Awww...this is just too precious!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 22, 2007
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    I hate following a comment like that. What she said...

  • PoetryPuppy
    September 22, 2007

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    this is the best, I really love it a lot, I love you from Kiarna


    • Amera gold member
      September 22, 2007
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      Thank you so much! I needed someone your age to tell me if it was any good or not. I love you


  • captain howdy
    September 22, 2007
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    this makes me think of my baby brother! He loves fire trucks! *hugs*


  • HaleyMary
    September 22, 2007

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    Great flow. I love the pic. It's so cute. That expression on the cat's face is precious. Good luck in the contest.


  • jo-el
    September 22, 2007

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    nice the pic is too cute. i wanna send this to my niece and little cousins. you should put a book together with all of your children's peices if you havent already done so. its really good


  • Faeryn
    September 22, 2007
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    aww! this is such a sweet poem, Amera! cute picture too; this kitten is adorable!
    -Tay-


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    September 22, 2007

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    Wonderful entry! Enjoyed the imagery, rhyme, flow and form.

    All the best,
    Charishma

  • celadia
    September 22, 2007

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    Great

    Great poem for children, if you have more like this one, you might think about publishing a children's book.


  • myrataal silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    Ah! You touched the child in me!

    And wow! So many years since I have jumped on the Firy RED TRUCK! You are so versatile! I loved this.

    Myra


  • The Voice Of One silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    I think I picked a good 'teacher', why were they not like you at school?
    The children will like this write.
    This read is very educational for a newbie, I hope I learn a lot from you, thank you.

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