Mountains have faces
frozen in frowns,
ruby smiles and wrinkled centuries:
a carbon copy of man.
Fluid the horizon in lubricant font;
sky's eyes shed their pearls;
hazy the gray granite
sketched in healing's blue graphite.
Trees line up plumbago branches,
while waterfalls sound fountains far
in swirls of sunlight painting
river banks of clay.
Nature resonates passionate fires
in nuclear reactor cores;
love in soft whispers
of pencilled kisses
writes a handful of diamonds
and stars, to crown this day
in life's winding journey
on eternal path.
Author notes
Picture Prompt: Picture by funkyricky
In a list
A contest entry
- A poem for my picture by Shining for You.
700 points, ended September 23, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautifully written, Lovely imagery and deeply meaningful. I loved the comparison to life and to people,. Wonderfully done hun, excellent work
Hugs, Bunny
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Oh amazing imagery is plastered onto this page!!! What a lovely write you have penned! I am pretty sure it is "Penciled", or maybe it can be written both ways. Forgive me if I am wrong. "Writes a handful of diamonds and stars, to crown this day" Such amazing words! Thanks for sharing this!
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gorgeous
Hi Ouvrou
Marvel in the euphony of your lines and gentle assonance:
"sky's eyes shed their pearls;" and the the alliteration:
"while waterfalls sound fountains far"
These carry your vision of love into my mind.
How wonderful!
Gorgeous.
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Special way with words that resonate and pierce the mind. This is an awesome poem. Thanks so much for sharing your imagery.
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Thank you, Poet ...
I am grateful that my poem is meaningful to you.
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I do like what you are going for but the flow seems to be abrupt. The fact that I know what the picture looks like also makes me wonder if the picture DOES indeed represent your poem, which makes it harder to imagine what picture(s) you are trying to get the reader to imagine. The picture that you placed works to your detriment.
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Thank you for reading ...
and bringing your perspective to this page, to become part of my picture.
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I like the idea of nature reflecting man 'a carbon copy'. It reminds me that all of what we do is felt the world over and is reflected in our environment and our minds.
If we were to understand this on a global scale, we might find that we begin to respect the earth and thus ourselves a whole lot more.
The last verse is a bit difficult to read as it ignores conventional grammar. It is missing its subject.
Perhaps this is deliberate?
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The last two stanzas ...
with the enjambment says Passionate Love writes ... etc. I think perhaps you should reread it in its complexity of simplicity 
Thank you for reading and commenting, W.
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A very beautiful idea and not less beautiful way of expressing it - absolutely amazing picture and interesting poem, makes one's imagination fly.
Beautifully written!
Great combination with the music You uploaded!
~G.J~
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Thank you, Precious.
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Magical.
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Thanks Allan
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Somehow I can't picture nuclear reactors as belonging to mother nature but now that I think about it there would be no 'nature' without them. Best of luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Carbon ...
is a very important part of nuclear reactors. All we see is of nature. 
You are being deliberate, eh?
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I really don't have anything critical to say. Your words were unique, and woven together well. Nice imagery throughout. The picture is definately inspirtaional. Best wishes and God Bless.
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This is an amazing write! I wish I could write poems like this. Keep it up!!
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You captured the soul of the painting provided. This is truly amazing and beautiful. If a picture can speak a thousand words then this poem speaks volumes. Brilliant young poetess!
Love,
Amera♥
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I really think this picture is so awesome ...
for it reflects what I see in nature. Thank you Amera.
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mountains have faces
frozen in frowns,
ruby smiles and wrinkled centuries:
a carbon copy of man
I almost didn't get past those lines alone. I was so drawn to the vibrant imagery and the meaning behind the words. As weak a comment as it may sound, this is simply beautiful.
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Thank you Poetess ...
for such a beautiful comment.
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what wonderful descriptions
'ruby smiles and wrinkled centuries' & 'fluid the horizon in lubricant font' are stellar
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Thank you LadyUnique ...
for taking the time to read ... Glad you liked this.
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Your interpretation of the picture is beautiful and poetically imaginative--you are a true poet.
Bill
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Thank you Bill ...
for your warm response. I appreciate it.
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Very imaginative.
My first impression is that you did a very intense and beautiful interpretation of this picture. Emotionally I could see the lanscape without seeing the picture, your words were so discriptive. This needs no changes as it was very easy to read. The title and first lines are perfect for this. The last line sums this in a good way. I thought it all very good and so did not have a favorite part.
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Carbon ...
forms part of our most important core elements ... I illustrated this by using the picture. OF COURSE the picture came in a sense AFTER my poem, which I wrote some time ago but not posted in THIS form ... But: when I saw the picture, I realized my poem was accurate in its essence.
Thank you so much for your thoughtful response.
Love
Myra
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"Mountains have faces
frozen in frowns,
ruby smiles and wrinkled centuries:
a carbon copy of man.
Fluid the horizon in lubricant font;
sky's eyes shed their pearls;
hazy the gray granite
sketched in healing's blue graphite."
wow the rich descriptions just within the beginning gave me shivers it is fantastic. YOu must be very chuffed with this write its amazing.
xxxx
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Did you listen to the music, Luverly? Please reread and do! I had shivers reading your comment! LOL LOL LOL You are so zesty.
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What a lovely take on the included picture. Your poem is rich with imagery, alliteration and life. Your many unique phrases enhance this work. Well Done dear poet.
Happy
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Ah I like your ID ...
thank you for making me happy! Let's dance on the mountains, yes?
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"fluid the horizon in lubricant font
skies eyes shedding its pearls"
Loved those lines, very atmospheric and great imagery.
The whole poem seems quite peaceful to me, and I think you captured the surrealism of the image really well. Excellent work and good luck!
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Yes is this picture not amazing?
The wondrous thing is: I saw this picture in my mountains here in South Africa. I wrote the poem partially some two months ago, and now only add some lines. It is quite surreal, and magical. Thank you for being so observant. You are a lovely reader to have.
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I like the first stanza especially.
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And I like your ID!
Allamanda? LOVELY. Tell me about it ...
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very good
Thanks for your entry into the contest and good luck -
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You're welcome!
I loved this picture. I saw it in my own country. Now you brought it to my attention. Thank you for that. The poem lingered and lingered and VOILA! You enticed it to dance its message! Thank you.
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