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Timeless


We met before the earth was made,
Before fates playful lines were laid,
We met in primal circumstance,
A simple spark of happenstance.

Eyes saw more beneath the skin,
Of timeless secrets held within,
Of chasing stars so long ago,
And this time we're not letting go.

Two hearts so bruised and tender,
So happy to surrender,
To their equal, finally found,
The love we share confounds,

All expectation.








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  • montez gold member
    September 23, 2007
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    Fair

    The flow in the last stanza lets this down IMHO.
    R.


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 22, 2007

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    Liked the rhythm, rhyme and flow in this poem - much love is timeless, and seems as if fated as well. Easy to read and understand what you are saying in these lines.


  • sullivanthepoet
    September 22, 2007

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    Exquisitely crafted work... Romantic without being sentimental; emotional without being mawkish - a fiendishly difficult balance to achieve - Bravo!


  • Lost-Rose-Petal
    September 22, 2007

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    wow your rhyming is amazing!!
    We met in primal circumstance,
    A simple spark of happenstance.
    Loved that!!! Amazing write! and the mood was set from the words..awesome job!
    MINDIE