rhythmic
against my hips
the warm jingle jangle
of yours
In a list
A contest entry
- Pay It Forward (10 words only) by Malabu ...Update..10/11..I will finish judging by weekends end..thanks for patience by Malabu.
450 points, ended October 15, 2007, 43 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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piece full trunk
will it ease
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Awesome...short but very yummy.
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thank you
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lol
I never thought I'd see the day you'd be in one of these contests...the goose is loose 
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yep, i'm here...just putting my music next to your arithmetic, lolol
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loose hip-replacement? lol
this tantalizes...
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Oh my! This was stunning. I am sitting here mouth agape and am speechless. Beautiful poem. It was so good I can hardly spell. Lovely.
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This is very in touch with your feelings. Great job and congratulations on the Silver...
Soulful Woman
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Thank you - I appreciate the kind comment
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I love very short very expressive poetry and this is perfect. I like the way you make us wait just a second for the last line.
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Jingle Jangle! Nice!! I loved it. It is mischevious, naughty and very cute.
Keep writing
Ankita -
my goodness
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Very earthy, this music, and makes even the most pragmatic of us stop to listen for the rhthyms of heart.
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damn
10 words and my mind is blooming naughty pictures
nicely done!
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very nicely written, i like where you took the prompt, kind of fun and sensual very well done. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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This is SO awesome - I love the imagery and fun, sensual quality of this short poem
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Subtle this is not not, but filled with heat and the tasteful sensuality that I crave from your work... thanks for satisfying my taste buds... they've gone too many days without sampling anything that quite measures up to this!
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And thoughts of Paris linger inside my mind right now
I went to Paris for three days, how beautiful those days were. walked to all the 'known' places, and the last day we sat in the grass at Montmartre for several hours - I even bought a bread especially to feed the doves with (we were plastered by them, how proud I felt when those doves came sitting on my arms, legs, hands and yes - even my head I felt such beauty streaming through me - I got pooped four times but even that couldn't bother me )
I'm wandering off again... Definately bookmarking this masterpiece my friend
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{sings} "I'll come followin' you."
Dammmnnn, Woman. "I hear a symphony". And some blues. And classical. And some rock. And some river currents, washin' us away with your few "simple" words. How you do dat, anywho??? Gorgeous. Love it when you put up a new one. NO ONE does "sensual" & "visual" like you do, my Sister. Good luck in Albert's contest, Sweetie. {hands Albert some smellin' salts} 
Vlindertjie
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The poetess places words so gracefully upon the page.This is outstanding poetry,just ten words and you have penned pure poetry,the reader has imagery,emotion and the intrinsic trademark of your talent which is to add ambience to words,allowing them to resonate on a plane which vibrates with harmony.Adore this.The musical reference is picture perfect for the sweet,sweet music that lovers make together.Absolutely brilliant.
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The Queen of Cinquain, Does it Again
Quite Mahvelous and Beautiful, Scribe.
~ Nicholas
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Oh my goodness....this is precious...stunning, unexpected, treasure.
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* sighs so long and hard she falls over in awe.....* Only you could put forth so much beauty and emotion in so few words. Sensual poetry at its very best....no exceptions! Sumptuous, dear one. Absolute perfection. Bookmarking this one! Brava!!
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the visuals are good with this one
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*swoons out of chair* eee ....
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Nic, I would expect nothing less from you but this is just gorgeous my friend. Lovely work here hon.
~Lyrical
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Thanks, Lyrical...glad you liked this piece of "music"
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this is an amazing piece, you know i have to say you are one of the best with short poetry. i think you can put down one word, and it would have a great impact.
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I think the only word that is a poem in itself is "love" - therefore I write it... thank you so much
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I have fallen behind on reading your poems ~
Sighs, you leave me breathless dear poetess ~
This is beatiful ~
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bringing a smile here for this wonderful image of hips and rhythym... so very nice...PK
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Every word in it emanates warmth and intimacy. You have also chosen line breaks very effectively. The "warm jingle jangle" of hips sounds nicely and I like the metaphor and relationship with the title.
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ok, either you had your hair done or you got change back from a Chicken Licken .... but being serious, you have taken a whimsical look at how familiar two bodies touching can be. Very sweet and innocent.
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i think the warm jingle jangle is supposed to be perverted.. would someone reassure nam..
i like this short write nic.. concise and perfect
m
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I really like this, Nicolette - it's sweet, concise, meaningful, soft, and loving, like only you write them I can envision this...
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This could be taken as an innuendo, with the "warm jingle jangle" but I guess only a pervert would see that.
Anyway, short, and nice.
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lovely ... so much within so little ... every word necessary creating the whole, worth its weight in gold ... (scuse the pun) ... >>> Gina
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Awesome! I've been so so anticaipating your beautiful perfect poetry. And voila! Here you pen something totally brilliant. The title was awesome. And so is the poetry.
Candy
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