B lush my love, under the starlight as
E nchantments blossom around us in magical
A ccord. Here we can make the world stop, and
U sher in our thoughts devotion, for
T here is passion in the wind and its
I ntertwined deeply within our paired souls.
F antasy turns reality, and we exist within this
U topian moment, immersed in bliss, with
L ove in the air and our hearts inclined.
L ove, I declare you beautiful, and
O n this night and forever forth you are my queen.
V enture with me, with hands together and we shall
E mbrace our beautiful love unto eternity.
A contest entry
- It's All About Love by myXheartXsings.
318 points, ended October 3, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~Give me your BEST Prewrites~ by Bean Sidhe.
1000 points, ended November 14, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow! I really like this poem. You've done very well. Acrostics are hard, but VERY impressive when they're done right. There's not really one particular part that I like better than another. I think the whole poem is written very wonderfully. Thanks for sharing! =]
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A beautiful acrostic that seems to read with the openness of free verse - not an easy accomplishment.
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This is beautiful. I love the way you had each line say beautiful love going down vertical. Very creative and sweet.
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Very heartfelt piece and well deserved for that trophy..your writing is so elegant and very passionate..you did really wonderful job here
Amarige
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Amazing!
Nice poem! This is such an influential and incredible write. Very well crafted! However I believe the spelling out of the poem's title in the poem itself was completely unnecessary it takes away from the understanding of the poem from the reader. Although, still this piece is so moving and motivating, I wish I would've thought of it first...lol!!! This is a poem that you should pubilish and put in a plaque because of it's intensity and how you talk about the way you're in love within the poem, very, very well done! I'm kinda jealous u thought of a piece like this before me...lol!!! Undeniably one of the best writes I've read in the past two weeks and I'm on this site almost everyday!!! What a legendary piece!
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Very Good
L ove, I declare you beautiful, and
O n this night and forever forth you are my queen.
V enture with me, with hands together and we shall
E mbrace our beautiful love unto eternity.
Wonderfull closing words
Rick
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leaves me smiling... sweet n sexy at the same time my fav lines r "IFULL"... which is precisely what your poem does (makes "i" full... if u get what i mean ;P)
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..Beautiful..
Beautiful; Strong, Meaningful.
I really liked this poem.
I liked how it flowed, how it all fell together.
It was beautiful and sweet. Thanks for posting this [:
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Breathtaking...
It made my heart flutter....pretty...
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aww that was really good nice job... well i can tell that i never found love but i really like this poem
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you have written an acrostic here like nothing I have ever read! this flows like a free verse, but the acrostic phrase is reinforced throughout the poem. "Love, I declare you beautiful . . ." You have left the word 'love' open to interpretation: are you talking about her or love itself? Either way, it works and is so beautiful . . . I hope she enjoys this too . . . lucky girl!
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awww
sounds like words of a true romantic! I like this,makes me wonder what she thinks of this? I get the image of a night time walk under the stars; with silent confessions,and words of a proposal. Nice work -
This is a very beautiful portrait of love. Excellent Acrostic, smooth with a wonderful word flow. The imagery was Excellent, and once again your poetry has delighted my day. Thank you for sharing!
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This is great! What a beautiful description of love. Plus, it flows so naturally it stands on its own as free verse, the acrostic is totally unforced. A very impressive piece! Good luck in the contest.
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I absolutely love this piece! very interesting and well written. wonderful use of vocab too. Lots of luck in the contest.
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