You came so suddenly
ending a long hot desolate time
with breathtaking beauty
you captivate my senses...
a visual feast...
though you bring death!
your touch is light and gentle
Your approach is nearly silent,
as a flitting butterfly!
You caress my skin
and yet that soft touch
brings coldness and death.
How could something,
so seemingly pure
and beautiful,
be the harbinger of death?
A messenger of doom!
You're a gentle reminder
of mortality and that all life
fails in time and yet...
With stunned fascination,
my eyes behold as you assume control
a merciless executioner
cold and unfeeling
with the faux illusion of purity!
I am enamored; beholden by your handiwork.
... though i know, your day shall end
warmth shall return and your icy grip
shall melt away for now...
I just stand in awe...
In a list
A contest entry
- And the winner is....Prewrites! Prewrites!! and Prewrites!!! by Daizy21.
450 points, ended September 25, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Book Contest: Get Published! (Last Chance!) by tinuelena.
1200 points, ended December 12, 2007, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this is a perfect description of winters snow
your flow is perfect
and this poem had so much image
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Hmmm.....
Can a grip be icy without being called icy?
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This is a stunning example of what a free write poem should look like!
Loving the background! And the imagery was beautiful.
Thank you for entering and good luck!
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Hm I like the new style, although the exclamation marks kinda bug me, because I don't really read poetry through excitement, and this one seemed calmer, so maybe I would revise taking those out and replacing with either periods or commas.
Other than that I love the imagery, just great poem altogether.
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This was a beautiful poem Mark. Your imagery was quite stunning. Excellent write my friend. Great interruptation of the picture. A pleasant read this morning. You take care, Sandy
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Very beautiful poem, you used excellent imagery. I love the snow, but I can't live in it! I would rather just visit it. Snow can be very deadly...this is a very excellent write!!!!!!!!!!
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Daddy, That's amazing! Breath taking and stunningly beautiful. THe perfect description for it! I love it love it love it!!!
Love you daddy! God bless!
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