tide draws
poison
from earth’s wounds
as evening reflections
bruise
themselves drunk
& jump from heaven,
ricocheting
in colour’s catharsis.
Author notes
Haha, yeah I was a bit slow for Wendy's quickie.
Picture inspired: http://foureyes.deviantart.com/art/porcelain-sky-2613696
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- I'm bored by NoUseForAName.
300 points, ended September 23, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite me! ~~ One day only ~~ 500 points to Gold, will be judged tomorrow. by Naridill.
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critique welcome.
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That tile sure pulled me in, and poem was great, esspecially for a quick poem, my only problem and its not really a problem its I wanted it to be longer
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Was intriguing. The piece itselg feels although it could be added to, to give more body but as it is, it stands its grounds and shows captivating imagery.
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This made me feel like paying attention to a sunset again. I love the minimalist approach, wish people would use it more often. More impact, fewer words. This is very well written and I can't think of a single thing I'd change.
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Very Good
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Thanks!
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