He holds his cross firm,
As he remembers all he's learned.
His aim's steady, his aim's clean,
He's taking in all he sees.
With a saber in her grasp,
She sails the seas that everlast.
New age pirate at the helm,
She sails and roams this realm.
They go, always in search,
Their lives they live their worth,
But always will they will roam,
Because they have no place that's home.
His ancestors were the seas,
On this ship lies her hopes and dreams,
This is her great escape.
He fires, and his breath escapes.
He runs low and out of sight,
Hoping to survive the night,
As she tackles wave after wave,
Trying to gain dock to stay.
His plan to stow away,
He waits for a ship to stay.
In the shadows does he move.
For his next target, he can't lose.
Her ship reaches the shore.
Here she docks to miss the storm.
In her quarters she does lie.
Awaitng the twilight sunrise.
He creeps along the walls,
Careful, for any sound should call,
Him out of the dark.
In silence, he does walk.
A creaking of her door,
She leaps up and grabs her sword,
The candle light does sway,
Nothing will stand in her way.
Slowly he opens the door,
As he creeps into the quarters.
His gun raised, his aim is clean.
By candle light, he is seen.
Gun to blade, they see their face,
His, cold and scarred, hers, filled with hate,
But their eyes, they meet again.
This is the woman he defends.
This is the man for which she roams.
Gun and blade, they hit the floor.
A love they saught, they've regained.
They hold on tight, once again.
A contest entry
- I WANT LOVE!!!!!! by Breaking Inside.
450 points, ended November 9, 2007, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think.
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So talented, I loved the end it showed that two totally different people's lives can cross more than once and that even if some one leaves your life for what appears to be forever, just hold on to their memory, cause you never know you may just get another chance, and "a love they saught, they've regained" I want to print this out, but I'm going to ask if you mind as long as I give you credit, just because I think it's a spirt lifter...and I would like to have a copy with me for when I get down....the suggestion thing is telling me to tell you how the poem could improve, but I can't cause this is one of the greatest poems I have ever read....it's beautiful, and your really talented....
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I... don't know what to say...
Thank you.
As long as you give credit,
I don't mind.
I... can't believe it turned out that well.
I do love her.
Greatly.
More than I can express.
I found the words for this,
But it pales in comparison to what I feel.
Anywa,
I am really glad you like it.
Thank you, again.
-Saint
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there you are man... your on the finals list!!!
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Aye.
I'm glad you like it.
I suprised myself when I wrote it.
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Beautiful. What a lovely love story you have narrated here. I must appluad you for using the he/she method. The story was quite clear to see...each word revealing the conflicts at heart for each Character, and then...the clomax. Their meeting. It was beautiful. I was drawn in and I must say it was well written. You are a very talented poet...keep up the great work.
May Your Muse Continue To Inspire You...
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Wowzie hunny. This is great
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the imagery you have used in this write is fantastic and made the entire thing a pleasure to read. thank you for sharing something worth commenting on and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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What a fantastic effort, it was a very visually exciting poem to read, the wording and style letting it flow easily, I loved how we follow the 2 in so close a narration, gave the emotion the intensity it needed to create the somewhat unexpected reunion,
Loved redaing it, you have done a great job on this one, well done.
-Brenden
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I really, really like this. It sounds so proper and elegant, and the choice of word in this poem, makes it simply breathtaking.
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wow man im dumbstruck... its beautiful. great write man.
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This was breath-taking Kyle. I agree with Em I was in tears most of the peice. We are all searching for something so desperately and we just want it- then we find it and its sure perfection.
Which is what this is. Pefection.
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Aaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! Oh my god! Kyle this poem is sooooo sweet. The girl you wrote this for is soooo lucky! It's sooo beautiful and soooo sweet and awwww! I'm freaking speechless! I love how well it is described and how in the end they meet and awwwwwwww! This is just sooo awesome!
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