too long have i seen
the way you look at me -
from afar
now come to me,
make love to me
with your eyes
at first
breathe me in,
i whisper to you
inhale my scent -
smell my nectar
take the sheet
that entangles me away,
touch me with your
fingertips, let them
dance across my curves
in a duo for two,
as only you can do
wrap me in your arms,
take me to our bed
where a silent tango
awaits our desires
pleasure me,
beyond the heavens tonight
as our bodies dance,
in celestial delight
breathe me in
my love
A contest entry
- seduction by Leslie.
525 points, ended October 16, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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very nice, slow and easy...
congrats on the Gold
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Congratulations on the Gold..This was deserving of it.
Soulful Woman -
Not bad. It probably could have used more allusion to the intellectual aspects of this love. But this is pretty good. - oce
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very nice, very well written, I must admit that I really commit to this piece, I enjoyed pretty much all of it, and I like simplicity, this was easy on the mind and easy on the feelings but yet, I felt I could relate… excellent job! And I really liked the image you use for this piece
Thanks for your entry.
Leslie
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This is so sensual..I love the way it just flows, almost like a dance. A beautiful piece you have written here.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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Make love to me with your eyes at first...I love those lines. To me, that is sensual and seducing....this is a really hot number, cousin
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Very seductive!!
a warm passionate piece of poetry with wonderful imagery... an almost spiritual connection conveyed in its content
HOT!!
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as our bodies dance,
in celestial delight
breathe me in
my love
amen...
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Do not feel the last two lines are really needed. The two lines above could be applied to the verse above, and still work in the read.
Just a suggestion.
A lovely piece that you have written here.
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Wow this is really good and very sensual I could feel this compelling me all the way. Very good dear!!!!
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"as our bodies dance,
in celestial delight
breathe me in
my love."
Another sizzler Sie! Pssssss
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Very sensual
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Excellent
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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this captivated me and drew me in I loved the way the words just seemed to fit in perfectly. Short, sweet and ever so seductive. Luv it!
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This is a perfect poem with perfect emotion. I enjoyed this read so much. I loved it. Great write
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Oh hum
how i wish someone would utter such tantalizing words to me... and in a breath...id be inhaling the fragrance of desire...and caressing the heat of passion pressed to soft moist skin...wonderful thoughts you present here...desirous they be...
Mal
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Excellent x2
wrap me in your arms,
take me to our bed
where a silent tango
awaits our desires
pleasure me,
beyond the heavens tonight
I could have picked any part as a favorite
This of corse drew my attention
I am male, not just a poet
Very seductive and beautiful
Rick
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This is more than just a seduction it is the total immolation of a man with the subtle dance of joy and promise of passion. The promise that will nova and sparkle past his dreams.
Really well done. . . I believe in understatement.
Love, Tom B.
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