I, the one you’ll both remember
Lost within each air kiss [affection]
Gorgeous, I am, each hidden ember
Belonging on my lips, my skin.
Satiate each deep desire
With my words, no, on my knees
For evil is Hell’s lasting fire
Extracting from [my] fantasies.
An invasion within your lasting pair
Crowned with the volume to ruin
He belongs to me, I don’t share,
Why should I let you in?
This is my story, I belong,
Masochism, sadistic with my burn
Each deed I do, quite wrong,
But the risk is what I yearn.
One last kiss, no from me,
From you to him, good-bye
For now I am the one he’ll see
I’ve brainwashed him with love’s lie.
Author notes
Okay...
Best: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2914814
Worst: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2884720#
You've also asked that I explain why I feel I should win this contest. Honestly... I'm in this for the improvement, the friends, the honor, and the pride... and I'm happy that I've made it to the final four with all of these amazing poets and this challenge. But if I shall state why I feel I should win, because I've put my heart into each poem I've composed for this contest and, although I've been greatly rewarded by the friendship and improvement, I think I could hold this trophy as a reminder. That's how I feel about winning this Bel... hope this is the kind of statement you've looked for.
As well about this poem... I generally don't write rhyme, and honestly this turned out better than I thought it honestly would and hope others enjoy it. This is true... just NOT from MY perspective... but anothers... Thanks for taking the time to view it.
xoxo
Meg
A contest entry
- Paper Pirates Teen Challenge ~ Final Round by Celticmoon.
1000 points, ended September 26, 2007, 2 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Most impressed for sure! Not usually your thing to rhyme but you have here and done so very well too. I am very proud of you hunny! You should be proud as well.
Love
Auntie Bel
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i want to wish you well in this contest that you have entered. you have entered a fine poem indeed. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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this was very good i love it keep up the great work this was my fav. part.....
This is my story, I belong,
Masochism, sadistic with my burn
Each deed I do, quite wrong,
But the risk is what I yearn.
keep up the great work!!!!!!!!!!!
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wOoOoOoOw verrry strong! i really like this. and its even better than youre not writing this in your pov. thats a good writer. great write.
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Awesomely done!, my dear step daughter!
I like the rhymes.
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I really enjoyed reading this poem. It had a great flow, great word usage, and the rhyme scheme was very well written. I rarely write rhyme because sometimes it has to be forced, but I didn't see that in this write. I felt that this was written from the soul through your pen. Awesome job!!
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Satiate each deep desire
With my words, no, on my knees
For evil is Hell’s lasting fire
Extracting from [my] fantasies.
An invasion within your lasting pair
Crowned with the volume to ruin
He belongs to me, I don’t share,
Why should I let you in?
this is the best part of your poem in my eyes. i really like this and i really think that you are good at what you do. i see poems like this and it makes me want to be as good as they are. we each write what we feel and this is deep . i trully like this and i think you should never stop writting. you really make ppl open up when they read this and that makes me happy. it takes a really good poem to do that.
Keep up the good work and never give up
DIamond -
A nice write. Smooth flow and lots of emotions. The last stanza is my favorite. Loved it. Good luck in the contest.
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