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One More Time

I stand before you

ever dearest love

tell me what you feel

who do you dream of

 

Do you dream of him

and put me to the side

Is he your main course

while I just abide?

 

I watch you sit,blink, rise and fall

you were the one that always stood tall

make me feel like number one

even when I bawl

 

Never let me sit beside you

you never understand

I waited and waited

but I never demand

 

I will wait for that day

when he will stand you up

and I'll be walking right on by

with 2 kids and a pup

 

Maybe it's too late to apologize

for what you did to me

I'll let you have just one more chance

to pin me with your beauty

 

I don't know why I fall for you

I'm rejected many times

you tell me to pull off a robbery

but I only bring back dimes

 

I leave notes and notes yet you think it's from him

but no

it's from me

But I'm over you now; ages ago

 

I guess it's time to leave you

since you won't be more than a friend

You've torn up my heart and everything else...

 

*sigh* The End.

 

 

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Notes are awesome for studying, but this one doesn't comply.

This poem is kinda epic to me.. I hope I get at least 3 or 4 star comments.. and NO SPAM.

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  • iWritePoems
    July 28
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    I like the rhyme. The poem is amazing and also sad, but it still is very good..


  • NiurTarow
    October 9, 2008
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    Impressive

    I write well with emotions, eh? You aren't too bad yourself. We have all had episodes like that, where the people we love can't see, or are in love with someone else. You have illustrated this image perfectly.

    Best of luck in this and all writing endeavors. May writer's block be a distant enemy long forgotten.

    -Niur Tarow


  • Dragons Lady
    September 23, 2007

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    This is absolutely amazing write. The emotions are felt with every word that you have penned. Very powerful in the way it rhymes effortlessly and flows so smoothly from the lips. Well done. I love the entire piece but one part really caught my eye.

    Do you dream of him
    and put me to the side
    Is he your main course
    while I just abide?

    Great write. Loved it.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    September 22, 2007

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    Wow

    I really loved this one :] Absolutely just wow. Breathtaking, maybe? Awesome? Powerful? AMAZING? haha of courrrse it is! Along with all your other poems, might I add ;-)
    I loved the rhyming in this poem. Very great use of it in this one, anddd my favorite line{s} are:

    "I don't know why I fall for you
    I'm rejected many times"

    Yeahhh I can definitely relate to those lines, because I felt like that for someone. *sigh* Ohhh the wonders!
    Anyways.
    Very beautiful poem herrre =]
    So much hurt, but yet again, writing just makes you stronger!!


  • SilverMoonFeathers
    September 21, 2007

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    I know how it feels to be this way i can't say i understand you because even the same types of pain and or situations are even different. The poem it has such a gloomy feeling throughout the poem from beginning to the end. It was filled with such an interesting way of format it caught me right from the start. You are an amazing poet and this poems is just so very very good. It did leave me speechless but i have to say something about something that some poem that is so wonderful penned and written is such a sad manner.

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