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"Collect The Light"

Salvo's streams of precious light,
in jubilation's fading falls.
Swept enchantress phantom fades,
in sequined lines cross field and knolls.

Snared enraptured feathered fae,
from the heavens streaming down.
Held through Winter's haze of gray,
fill of warmth's memory found.

Spheres of liquid ambered gold,
drench empyrean gilded might.
Spill of heaven's ambrosial Sol,
Light a way through darkened blight.

Oh, shimmer shine shallow line's sublime,
fill with warmth bleak Wintry clime.



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  • ecrivain01
    September 22, 2007
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    Very nice ...

    I'd put "fond" between "warmth's" and "memory", but otherwise, I'd say it works as it is.


  • Arkbear gold member
    September 22, 2007

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    Enchanting Sonnet ~

    A Rich win with this splendid Sonnet ~

     

    You have captured this Art so well Poet ~

     

    Everything from your grammatical choices to

    your Presentation are remarkable ~

     

    Congrats on that Gold!

     

    Bear ~


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    An absolutely stunning sonnet to compliment a gorgeous image! Wow, this is truly a spellbinding write filled with amber warmth overflowing each line.
    Any idea as to the photo credit? It is very inspirational! I wouldn't mind trying my hand at it!
    Keep writing, you left me breathless with this one.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 22, 2007
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    Congrats to you for the big win,wtg


  • Sonja
    September 22, 2007

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    Even the Shakespeare (sorry Shakespeare, but this is true) could envy you for this kind of poetry. This one captured my attention allowing me to fall in love with it on the first sight. Used words is talking to me that this poem must be written from somebody who is well educated to use them all at the right place making this poem to perfect flow, I can see it, I can hear it... Perfect!
    ~Sonja~


    • suseann
      September 22, 2007
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      Oh I'm blushing! Honored humble and chigrined.I so appreciate the flattery you've expressed.And wish to thank you from the bottom of my heart for the compliment and the gold.And wish to say congrads to those who placed also.There were many fine pieces entered here.Thank you Sonja.


  • capricornpoet
    September 21, 2007

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    enchanting

    Ambers of light fill the soul and body here in this
    magnificient poem of drinking the life of it ..
    Lovely metaphore , a poem that feels and lives through the body ..original and sorcery..

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