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distant voices

girls and boys flirt

no one likes me

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emotion: rejected

A contest entry

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  • Dollbaby4ever
    October 19, 2007
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    I like the way you describe so much using so little. I think a lot of people can realte to this.


  • KatHardKore
    September 29, 2007
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    I like it. Its amazing how so few words can explain a lot. Good job.

  • TooRainbow silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    Great job! "distant voices": feeling like an outsider, unable to ignore the presence of those nearby. "girls and boys flirt": a party without an invitation. "no one likes me": the crushing blow. The poem as a whole leaves an impression of being left out and getting a good face-smearing anyway. You describe rejection well. I get a real sense of envy, humiliation, and anger turned inward from your lines. I think any reader will immediately identify with your emotion. Thanks for entering this!
    Sheryl