The doll dies
The baby falls
Who doesn't treasure death?
In a list
A contest entry
- Pay It Forward (10 words only) by Malabu ...Update..10/11..I will finish judging by weekends end..thanks for patience by Malabu.
450 points, ended October 15, 2007, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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profound this is
though I cannot find myself treasuring death...I see the direction this takes...life may be crule and a place where a soul becomes supressed...desire for death is much more worthy than a life dreaming of something you feel never will come...sorrow is a death...to smiles
Mal -
I don't get it.
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ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm wow, this is a most unusual take on the prompt if i must say so myself
if that's where your treasure lies, more power to ya best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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Interesting
Really loving this, bro. The last line struck me
"Who doesn't treasure death?". Its comes out a little sadistic like there's someone in the background with a wry smile enjoying the scene
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Jesus.
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Oh. I came from love, and babies, and sweet moments to CRASH into this verse.
A hard hitter.
Well done. ~Pamela
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well..hmmm... dont really know what to say bout this one
different indeed it is to the others i have read...hmmm have to agree...short blunt to the point...
good luck to you
Tory -
Short and to the point, little bro.
All the best...Sis
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short
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nicely done...i like it.....
love you
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