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bruised



gaze deeply at
this flesh,
this stain,
this stark abiding span
of humankind -

tell me true,
what colours glow
within?


 

I see no white;
        no black ..

just
hints of yellow edges;

some brown

                   [ some gently tanned ]

& pinks
& purples
   layering together
   softly made -

all blended from the same
stone bruise
that sits in God's heart.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Inspired by something poetryality wrote:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3425680

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  • Sign of the Swine
    December 12, 2007

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    Too bad people can't look at skin color through this mindset. I don't think that will ever be able to happen. Beautifully written.


  • grannyeri gold member
    September 22, 2007

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    Really something to think about - what you write about here. We are all humans, yet some always think they are better, and treat others ike dirt. Always those in any race who think others below them - color, religion, race, creed - they do not need a reason to think this way - parents are like that too. Liked the flow and the message shared in these lines.


  • Namita silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    Wow. Awesome. The last lines were so powerful... congrats on the much deserved silver.

    Candy


  • Akimbo silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    human

    how true... you don't have to scribe skin very deep to see we are all the same... why can't we remember it?


  • aliceramone silver member
    September 21, 2007
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    interesting piece...great use of colors into a great ending...congrats on the well deserved silver.


  • poetryality silver member
    September 21, 2007

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    If more people gathered on this mindset, the world would be an easier place to live. I was raised by parents who showed us that to love everyone is to truly love. We never saw color, we simply saw humans.

    We lived next door to an interracial couple when I was a child. The father was Black and a milkman, and the mother was White and a homemaker. They were so in love and had four children. People on our very street would snicker and make jokes, "those are the milkman's zebras", and nasty things of that nature. I despised those people and loved dearly my neighbors and befriended their children. We still talk today.

    The reality is Noah had three sons, Ham (dark - Black) Shem (Olive colored - Asain]), and Japheth (fair - White)...three different complexions, and we descended from them by way of Adam. Bascially all of humanity shares the same lineage. How could it be that we have come to a place (with all our intelligence) in the world where we hate our brothers and sister?

    Esau and Jacob (Jew and Muslim) are at war, they warred in their mother's womb. Maybe it is just meant to be but it causes me grief.

    I am glad that my poem inspired this wondrous work poet. I do believe that it is time we banned together to stomp out ignorance. I have a zero tolerance for racism. Not because I am black but because I am human, a mother, a daughter, a sister, and yes, a friend. The people I love are all complexions. What a wonderful garden they make,. You are one of them.



    God Bless ♥

    Renee


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    September 21, 2007

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    Excellent

    This would truly be a day in paradise if all would see
    ...just hints of yellow edges...

    Remarkable piece and very profound. Congratulations on your trophy, however, I must say, this verse speaks volumes and stands a shiny gold on its own merits.

    I think everyone should read this verse and understand its message.

    I was completely possessed by it. Superb poetry!

    ~Pamela


  • LadyLavender gold member
    September 21, 2007
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    A truly stunning write!


  • Rowan gold member
    September 21, 2007

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    underneath it all yes, we are an array of colors; I like the metaphor of bruises. It's sad how some can't see past the surface of what they see, to what actually lies at the heart of what matters. Well said.

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