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Toy Box

There’s a little doll in the store’s stand
A wand was endowed by her sewer in her hand.
“Granting our wishes”, childish remarks,
as they poke their noses on the store window pane.
Not anymore we remember this day,
for we have grown in our own different ways.
Life enveloped by hate, stress and pain.
creating the distorted reflection inside.
In this manner we became an ennui

Creating such dull, and purple visions of us. 

If we can just remember our childish remarks,

Author notes

Life is a painful journey but think of the bus stop of wonderful experiences.

Word bank
Ennui means world-weariness

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  • puzzledone121
    September 29, 2007

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    tiredness of living? maybe the secret is we should not cease to play....these days even kids know there's no such thing as magic...its just fun fun fun....or maybe if we do not take things seriously...the hurts of life might not be as painful....

  • Virgoan
    September 27, 2007

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    There is rich and fluid thoughts in this piece. So far my favorite from your works that I've read. The way you used the punctuation highlighted the pieces accordingly. In addition, thanks for the word you shared.

    On a personal note, the last comma was placed at the end of the poem. Was it intentional? Just my thought

    Overall, a well executed piece.

    Thanks for sharing and keep on writing my friend.

    VIRGOAN

  • pruedence
    September 24, 2007

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    Oh, yes would be wonderful to remain a child..it was so much easier then...


  • Denierim
    September 22, 2007

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    We all grow up in our own unique way, and we always do grow up. This poem was very good at pointing that out. We grow up to be something completely different (in some parts) than we used to be as a child, but still we gling in to those memories we received from that time. We hold on to the child inside of us, no matter in what way.

    This was a great and interesting read that spoke volumes to me. Wonderful work with this one!


  • crimsondew
    September 21, 2007

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    Keep it up!

    Beautifully penned words that hold much truth...the more practical we become in our daily affairs, we seem to be swimming away from that childhood awe and innocence!Much missed around!

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