Chaos litters streets of mayhem
as confusion threatens to asphixiate.
Washed away in sea of shambles
unable to run as limbs become polarized to this spot.
Powerless to reach that resting place
as lights of mental turbulence blind true course.
Standing motionless against the tide
in fearful anticipation of the drowning,
the flood of worldly panic overcomes
as essence drifts away in search of high tide.
Author notes
Picture Prompt (10 lines)
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Ten Lines by Freestyle Bushido.
500 points, ended September 22, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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HOODWINKED! *cool*
YOU BEEN HOODWINKED!
Wow! This was deeply rich and moving. So intense, yet....I could swear that the feeling is so real, that I, too have been there. Great job, my friend. Love, D. 
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Works nicely to its climax in the last line, which is well worded and evocative...and visually intriguing. Well done.
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very beautifully crafted and a wonderful take on the prompt
it really gave it more depth and i love it
well done and best of luck -
Excellent
Very well done. And such a great ending. Best of luck in the contest.
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...in search of high tide.
This piece is so excellent and moving, it brought tears. Superb. ~Pamela
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Excellent poem! I love the words you pulled out this poem, it tales dark, moody yet very true to humanity tale. This was a very creative and I enjoyed all ten lines of this piece. Thank you for entering and best of luck 2ya
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