do you truely beleive,
in ghouls and ghosts
for if you do
i am some sort of host
a host of a place
quite twisted and sick
for i am not kidding
this is no sort of trick
your mind tells you things
you come to call fake
just like that poor little boy
who was down by the lake.
with the eyes so red
and the and a big evil grin
do i need to explain were that poor boy had been.
saying its ok you're reasureing yourself
and analizing the state of your destruat mental health
beleiving and seing are two different things
just like a bird with two broken wings
A contest entry
- HALLOWEEN EXTRAVAGANZA - Open til Oct. 31st by Little Eagle.
9800 points, ended November 3, 2007, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thanks for your entry
Quite a few spelling mistakes and it seemed to have a slow start, but toward the end it picked up momentum. Spelling mistakes: believe, reassuring, analyzing, destraught, and seeing are the correct spellings.
Happy Halloween!
Tammy
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Very good! I love the rhythm and rhyme used here. I love how you started off literally telling a story to spook others to answer the question, do you believe? Or do you not?
Wonderful job here. Keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest
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thank you
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this was really interesting and told a very good story
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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thank you
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Great poem, fab flow and just right for this contest. Good luck!
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thank you
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i think it is one of the better poems i have written
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