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A good child

My class consisted of 3 types of people good, popular, and evil i was a good one i just had to be i was the one filled with glee i was the leader, the head of the pack and when evil struck i struck back, and then one day a new kid came he wasn't wild he was tame, he fought back with words fought with emotion he was as calm as the soft gentle ocean and then one day when the good and evil were going to fight he said this isn't right he calmed us down but the evils didn't frown they grinned and said chicken, loser, idiot, nerd but from what i heard they were the nerds because we had a tool and it was words, the guys name was max and he was smooth as wax nothing could bring him down, there's always that person that you can relate to some one who doesn't hate you instead they're kind nice shy and witty and they don't feel pitty because they think that they're equal think we're strong and they were right all along now back to my story of me and max we liked to sit back and just relax one day we were walking me and the gang of friends max was our leader our hope, our source of wisdom and then they came, the evil the vile the cruel and they were angry because they couldn't understand us they didn't know why we didn't fight didn't hurt why we didn't treat others like dirt and they attacked they pulled out a gun and max flung in front hoping we'd survive live another day have our life, the shot rang out and lay like a trout with a glint in his eye, we ran and they came they shouted my name but this wasn't a game i kept running and then bullets were fired i hoped max hadn't expired i fell to the ground chin facing up eyes wide open wide as a cup, they looked at me and spat on my face and then they continued to pace, i had faked it and they beleived it, my friends were dead all but one, Max who had jumped in front of the gun, "don't seek revenge" he said and then for a while he whore a great big bloody smile, i knew it was over i knew he was dead and there wasn't much to be said, i turned the guys in the very next day but that was no reason to cheer hooray, Max was gone and so were the others they were close, they were like brothers, so remember this sad story because your life could turn gorry, don't take friends for granted hug them and love them while you still can they're your friends but they're not immortal

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  • xHeartofDarknessx
    September 21, 2007

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    Very Well Writen
    it was very hard to decided the winner
    but all in all evan though you were all very good
    and hope you will enter my next contest comeing soon
    so i am now saying tank you for takeing part in my first contest
    Kepp up the good work
    Thanks
    xBx


    Is This A True Story .. if so im sorry
    it is amazingly Wrote Made me feel Anger more than sadnes to be Honest
    at the fact that people could do such a thing
    But the the sadnes that max jumped in front of that bullet and lost his life for the poepl he loved
    Loved it
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