When it rains,
I think about that day,
We spent it together playing,
Just playing in the sweet, sweet rain.
When it rains,
I cry many tears,
Full of confusion,
In this world full of pain.
When it rains,
I just want to tell you that
I'm sick of crying, I'm tired of trying.
Yes, I'm smiling, but inside I'm dying.
When it rains,
I start to smile,
Because so far being friends with you,
Has made life worth while.
When it rains,
I wish that we would be more than friends,
And that our lives would never end.
Author notes
I used both options.
The title (when it rains
and the line:I'm sick of crying, I'm tired of trying. Yes, I'm smiling, but inside I'm dying.
optionIII about the rain
option 9. write about love
I used
When It Rains By Paramore for my inspiration
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When it rains,
I think about that day,
We spent it together playing,
Just playing in the sweet, sweet rain.
I too like the rain this is a wonderful intro it pulls
the reader into the write. I like the content and over all theme to the write.
Thank you for your entry.
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I think this is a great poem. ANd i am myself obsessed with the rain, and yes how many times i've cried together with the rain.Also pain doesnt last forever,just remember that and aslo that God is on your side. Great.And yeah sometimes crying gets old, but other times we need it to feel better.
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A good revealing poem with an interesting background story. Thank you for entering!
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I like it! I like how you put two options together. It's good. My favorite line would have to be:When it rains,
I wish that we would be more than friends,
And that our lives would never end.
Good luck in the contest. : -
you have alot to think about when it rains.......
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