For my father, and for my son
I pray for good days yet to come
I'll never leave, lifes just begun
I'll hold his hand, I'll be the one
I'm here, but still it hurts to say
That Daddy's just one call away
We cuddle, crawl, we creep and play
But It's like that's always yesterday
I try so hard, to find my path
So we can be together, half
He smiles at me, he makes me laugh
My only cure, when I feel sad
Not just a father, I'm a dad
So it's my job to be the pad
Of paper, surface, pencil scratch
His pain and anguish on my back
He's still a little guy, by age
And everywhere he goes, his stage
He's like the bookmark on the page
That reminds me why I face the day
For my father, and for my son
I pray for good days yet to come
I hold my hand up to the sun
And pray to he who I have shunned
God knows I mean what I have said
I'd give my life, not just the lead
It takes to write a poem for him
Without my little man, lifes grim
But he's my motivation, fate
My life I'd like to dedicate
To make sure that my boy achieves
The dreams that I could never reach
I love you Braden, please come home
You'll never face this world alone
I promise you I'll make things work
Your birth is all my life is worth
Please tell me what you think
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Brilliant!!!
For my father, and for my son
I pray for good days yet to come
I'll never leave, lifes just begun
I'll hold his hand, I'll be the one.....
....... Just beautiful, Honestly.
The flow to this poem is absoulutle perfection in my eyes. I can only really appreciate poetry that rhymes as , to be honest, i dont really understand the stuff that does'nt. This is in my own style, flows perfectly an is both deep and meaningful.
Well done on an amazing write
Steve
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I believe the sentiment is well expressed. As a parent I know the feelings well. You ask for critical and I have only one suggestion...the rhyme could use some work. When done well, rhyme is beautiful. For an example let me suggest...
For my father, and for my son
I pray for good days yet to come
I'll never leave, lifes just begun
I'll hold his hand, I'll be the one
For my father, and for my son
I pray more days filled with fun
I'll never leave, nor will I run
I'll hold your hand, I'll be the one
Hope this helps...God Bless. -
Incredible!
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I'd say you have the inspiration that most poets would cry for. This is simply beautiful. I know that seems like such a simple comment but it fits and needs no fancier words to describe it.
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oh my goodness this is really Pretty i really like i
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Beautifully Written And Powerful as well!
I have two son's that are Identical twin's and as the same as you feel I personally feel what you wrote is worth alot.especially the part where you wrote You'll never face this world alone and Your birth is all my life is worth.I say these word's also cause I had to stay in bed for 4 Month's and the Hospitial 2 week's before having my twin's for them to even be alive on this very day today!
*******LoveSpell-PurpleRose*******Brenda Gae Harper
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Tear!!!!
This poem actually brought tears to my eyes!!! It is such a heartfelt piece!!! The emotion and the love just jumps from the page. An amazingly beautiful write. Your son is lucky to have you!
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