A blaze of fireworks a stellar display
Lights glitter, melodies and playful tunes
The tent adorned in wonderful array
Beautiful woman with heady perfumes
Lights glitter, melodies and playful tunes
Acrobats surprise, astound and dismay
Beautiful woman with heady perfumes
As clowns in the ring are pretending to play
Acrobats surprise, astound and dismay
Animals dressed colorfully gallop and dance
As clowns in the ring pretend to play
Young men fling at the woman a teasing glance
Animals dressed colorfully gallop and dance
The tent adorned in wonderful array
Young men fling at the woman a teasing glance
A blaze of fireworks a stellar display
Author notes
Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.
The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanza then repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
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A contest entry
- The Pantoum Challenge by Denierim.
2000 points, ended September 30, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites? Sure! by xCandieKissesx.
300 points, ended August 29, 2008, 41 entries
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Comments
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Aww! Only a true artist could pull something like this off. It was wonderfully written and the rhyme scheme was very well done. Kudos and good luck!
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wow
only an accountant can do this.... lol..... it is very good, very good the real very good, not the ordinary very good....and the picture sets of the ryhmn well in the writing of it
...great piece of work -
heady perfumes...
Great work my friend! Some wonderful imagery in this and very effective descriptive passages. Very clever! Good luck in the contest!
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Oh, this one's wonderful. I've never really been to a live circus performance, but this really drew a nice picture of it. I wish I could get to circus one day though...
Anyway, I like the way you described the circus with this piece. So filled with life and color and laughter... It was like a watching a show for real. The flow was wonderful and the rhyme (at least in my opinion) flawless. This is definately among the best Pantoums I've read in a long while. Wonderful work!
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