End to languid days,
breeding season’s deadly strife;
evolutions chance.
Unto the victor
go the spoils of the future;
genes interweaving.
Brutal summer dance,
expended year after year
by animals all.
Author notes
Picture prompt from Arkbear's Poetry Formed XV contest:
http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2369/420.jpg?1190306157
Picture Credit: Wyoming Edge Outfitters
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XV by Arkbear.
400 points, ended September 20, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Haiku Contest by misticmoonlite.
675 points, ended September 24, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Such a beautiful haiku you have penned here. I find the first stanza my favorite as it seems stronger and gives support to the last two stanzas.
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Thank you. I think that's probably because this was originally written, or started as just a simple haiku, but when I finished it I felt I had more to say, so I decided to chain, so usually the follow-up idea isn't always as necessarily as strong as the original.
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GOOD job
I saw the picture, the poem itself says a lot as it envisions the action of the birds,almost like a dance,thanks for entering and good luck,mm
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Thank you very much. That is the way I have always seen it with birds at mating season, it always seems to be more of a dance than a conflict when trying to woo a mate.
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Cool entry ~
Loved your chain of Ku' here ~
Lovely presentation and great grammatical choices to follow strict count ~
...Not a fan of all CAPS, but some Poets do it ~
It is a bit distracting...but does not
take away from the brilliant entry ~
Good luck Poet ~
Bear ~
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Many many thanks. The caps is more out of habit (plus I type most of my pieces up on MS Word first before transferring it over and usually forget to change it), more than it is a stylistic choice.
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I like this one very much - my favourite stanza is the second one with:
"unto the victor
go the spoils of the future
genes interweaving."
That's special!
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Thank you very much. That is the one that I was having the hardest time with, too. For some reason I hit a block.
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