Silent shivers
In a bed of snow.
Dew dripped
Icicles pulled jagged
By gravity.
The sun ray's
Projecting sweetly numb
Sensations.
A lovely winter
Displayed all around
On a canvas
that slowly
melts away...
A contest entry
- Winter, Spring, Summer or Fall by lindaburns.
950 points, ended September 27, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I love how at the end of the poem you give the feeling of the winter melting away, it gives great effect.
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This piece has wonderful potential.
I would love to see you carry this motif completely through all the seasons; that could surely earn a gold.
Best of luck.
Love,
liquid -
Pretty as a picture.
Very good. I like "a canvas that slowly melts away". Thank you for entering my contest.
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