Eve's wish for a new leaf
Surpassed Adam's belief,
But he humoured her passion...
And so began... fashion!
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- Do you Clerihew? by cricketjeff.
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Comments
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Very Good!
I laughed out loud, very nice.
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And men and women have been doing that ever since. At least Eve's stylish fig leaf didn't have a price tag she felt she should hide from Adam! It was probably months before he even noticed it.
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Very clever
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Priceless!
This is one I'll have to booknark indeed! Thank you for sharing!
I really enjoyed this one!
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Ha. This was neat. Packs a punch. Good luck in the contest!
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LOL! From the title, I never saw this coming. Now I've had my chuckle with my morning coffee. :-)
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God gave Adam and Eve new leaves to turn over
But as a consequence, poor Adam became a bit of a rover
And Eve was condemned to give birth in extreme pain
Just because her man had a acted like a wean
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Yes, and Adam got into the game too!
This game of clerihews suits you. Best of luck!
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a clever piece, and well done dealing with a rather somber situation in a light manner.
The only thing that I see could be improved is the ellipses (...)being removed. They, at least in my mind, are unnecessary and simply distract the reader from the poem itself.
Other than that, well done. I enjoyed the read greatly
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Very good
I like it
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