you and I
watch glass moons
inside our fingers
with hands
scenting mornings
that call you
fleur-de-lis,
white
january snow
of your wings
can take me beyond
our love
into september,
and still I breathe
a poem
for our heart,
and your eyes soar
into water
just as azucenas do.
Author notes
azucena - lily
fleur-de-lis - a very beautiful design representing flowers
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Comments
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Soft and sensual, very inspiring. I love the imagery, a beautiful piece indeed.
Much luck
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Egads *swoon*
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Any write that uses Fleur-de-lis has my applause!
Then you surround it with a soft and sensual atmosphere and tint it with love. Wonderful!
Blue
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This is so beautiful, I love the fact that you write saying 'our' fingers and 'our' heart - as one, very wispy and soft. Thank you for your entry
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azucenas a lovely image, a symbol lost beauty and remembrance, a very expressive and gentle poem here, so very well done...PK
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Beautiful thoughts of love!
And lillys were one of my mother's favorites, so they bring back fond memories.
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interesting format, but great sense of imagery and a very unusual yet uplifting take on the prompt, good luck to you also.
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Well you certainly have a mind like a flower, and such grace in petal scented flow these words are...so wonderful is India's smile this morning
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This is a very nice piece
white
january snow
of your wings
can take me beyond
our love
into september
Love these lines.Goodluck in the contest.Best wihses
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A very beautiful poem! Very lovely and soft with beautiful metaphors!
Nicely done!
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This is lovely, and Lynda is right, so pretty and soft, just like the lilac background. Loved the water lily comparison here - reminds me of the lotus lily!! The heart takes flight or flows away...
~ Nicolette
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such a lovely poem!
Pretty and soft...
Lynda
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prompt is:
"When the heart takes flight"
or
the pic above...
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