From a distance,
you catch my eye
following your strut,
your hips sway
like music in motion
the bounce of your hair,
with a face pale
as the moon
neck that is slender
to breast firm
in full bloom
stuck in a trance,
as you walk up to me
our eyes meet
you smile-
I look down,
d
o
w
n
d
o
w
n
as you stroll pass me
while your ass shakes,
fading with distance
perfumed air Lingers
you know
what I’m thinking
and you never,
looked back
Author notes
man's food
A contest entry
- Fresh Freestyle Free Verse!! by requiempoet.
900 points, ended September 27, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - delete by Melissa Gayle.
390 points, ended September 27, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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sometimes you win sometimes you loose smile
could picture you doing this
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I feel like I have been oogled. LOL
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Ummm Mel
Ill put my eyes back into my skull and reel my tongue back in....LOL
thanks
Mal
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man's food, anyhooo...good entry for my contest, thank you for entering. So do girls really distract men that much?
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You've brought that very visual element of the male world and managed to roll it into words. Not as easy a task as some might assume. Clever but subtly so
At least you're honest. That's the first step toward resolving an addiction you know
Of course, there's a nagging little voice that tells me, you're not all that interested in detoxing
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What man would detox
himself of admiring the tantalizing features of a woman?
certainly not I...
Ahh a women is
a feast for the eyes
a dish of delights
with every morsal
to be savored
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*blinks slowly* Ummm - a gay one?
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I really like this one. This happens so much, this instinctive attraction that we have to others. Great poem, I like your sweet voice in this, and I am sorry about that ending
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well at least she looks
good even if my desires fade with her in the distance...lol
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..you naughty naughty boy..lol..
mans food. That cracked me up. I loved Nicolettes comment!
Excellent form here; ahem, I meant structure.
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I like this....
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thanks
love the thoughts as I wrote it...sad ending though
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LOL...man's food - at least you're acknowledging it. Lovely visuals you've painted here as well as the look into a man's world!! At times like these you should look "up", my friend! This poem reminds me of something that happened to me years ago... this guy walked past me and I looked back...at exactly the same time he looked back. Well, we both just burst out laughing. I enjoyed this "stroll" through your eyes.
~ Nicolette
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Gee did I give myself away?
I think most women are afraid to look back...guess you're a rare breed girl...haha...somehow I picture your rubbernecking experience to be a sensual smile...lol
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But Ohhh I do look up
and everywhere else too...when you admire art...you must delve into the whole canvas of beauty...as for me...I love to admire the shape of a womens tush...ahh shame It's the last thing I see as she fades into the distance....haha...
for you beautiful...
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