(Verse 1)
Sit in a studio get out my faith
sing a little something,
about a better place.
Looking for a smile,
when tears come out your eyes.
Been here for a while
so I guess it's no surprise.
(Chorus)
But don't get me wrong,
don't get me wrong,
don't get me wrong
its just my song
and I'm free to see
where we went wrong
all of you and me,
are ticking
(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa (BOMBS)
(Verse 2)
Jokers are the teachers
that keep us all in line.
Looking for the answers,
guess we've known them all the time.
Now we're coming to a cross roads,
look the devil in the eyes.
So how do you think he looks,
Cry cry cry cry,
Cry cry cry cry,
Cry cry cry cry cry....
(Chorus)
Don't get me wrong,
don't get me wrong,
don't get me wrong
It's just my song
and I'm free to see
where we went wrong
all of you and me
are ticking.
(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa(BOMBS)
(Verse 3)
When we look in to a west wind,
there's an east wind by our side.
And everywhere we look,
we've got no place to hide.
We want to take a moment
but the moments running out.
When words just meet the silence.
everybody's, everybody's, everybody's out....
(Chorus)
But don't get me wrong
don't get me wrong,
don't get me wrong
it's just my song
and I'm free to see
where we went wrong
all of you and me
are ticking,
(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa (BOMBS)
Chorus x2 fade
Author notes
Lyrics in a recording studio, Music can capture each and everyone of us at any chosen moment or time. Be prepared it could be your turn next!
11) Write a song about anything
A contest entry
- War Child by bloved.
600 points, ended December 10, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me some dark, cryptic lyrics.. Or make me wonder what the hell you are talking about! by Silversunshine.
600 points, ended January 12, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sing us a song - Anything Goes! by TimeLady42.
512 points, ended May 3, 2008, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - something for everyone by -shiningstars-.
1100 points, ended August 16, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can't sing? Can write? Enter your songs here! by upperworld06.
700 points, ended March 23, 71 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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awesome, i love the chorus and the flow and rhyme are amazing. thanks for entering and good luck
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this is really good, it's a great song with a very powerful message about the world today, best of luck in the contest
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very interesting...I think this would be a great song with music going with it...it has alot of potential for sure...good job...thanks for entering
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Creative
This is a really neat way to describe so many things. My favorite is the first verse, "Sit in a studio get out my faith
sing a little something,
about a better place.
Looking for a smile,
when tears come out your eyes.
Been here for a while
so I guess it's no surprise." It's a great write.
~shining
good luck.
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Not an exact fit to the contest, but nice. I think it could definently make a good song. I like the "babababa(bombs)" part. Very interesting.
Thanks for entering.
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Nice work, excellent flow. Had a Foo Fighters/COurtney Love feel (in my perspective of course). Excellent technique and pre-arrangement.
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Thanks for reading and commenting on my song lyrics.
All the best,
~T.S~
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I like!
A song about writing a song.. I like it! And you definatly have the crytisism element there! Nice song!
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Thanks...
I am glad you liked these Lyrics.
I think I have said everything about the song, and how it would sound etc, in previous comments.
Thanks again for reading and commenting on this one.
All the best,
~T.S~
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Awesome! This is very very creative and very original! This is something I would never be able to come up with on my own, but something I wish I had the talent to create! You have some extraordinary talent! You should make this into a real song and get it recorded or something! I like it because its like a forewarning and it has a dark twist to it, anything with that in it I have a particular liking to as long as it doesnt have anything about cutting or suicide and you avoided both, you were very unique and innovative about the whole thing! awesome job!!!!
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Thanks Again
These Lyrics to me are my personal Favorite... It will never matter how good a song comes out, unless the message held within the song is pure. Again these lyrics have come from deep within myself, and should tell you my "sometimes" disappointment of the Human race and it's political motivations.
Thanks again for reading and commenting
Glad you liked this one as well.
All the best,
~T.S~
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Nice Spin
Nice spin on my contest
I didn't expect a song/lyrics....But I really like this...its very creative...especially the
"(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa (BOMBS)"
That part is crazy good...its probably even better live...
Thanks for entering...I think you have one of the most original pieces in my contest!
good luck
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Thanks... Really glad you liked these lyrics of mine.
All the best,
~T.S~
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I like it. I'm not a big fan of the part where you go "(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa
(BOMBS) bababababa (BOMBS)" but it's still a good song. Keep it up. -
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Thanks, That part is just an expression of the fast rift of a guitar. Obviously it's not that easy trying to express the sounds and beats that come with the lyrics.
Thanks for reading
All the best
~T.S~
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i hear the music!
sounds great!this pen(on song lyrics)is so smooth n' easy read, the "music" just kicked in as i read it!best of luck in the contest!
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Thanks
Thanks a lot for reading, I am glad the lyrics reached your inner ear. Thanks again.
All the best,
~T.S~
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It's easy to tell that these are lyrics and that they are meant to be sung. I also got a very strong impression of what i would do with these lyrics, musically speaking. These are two important qualifications that i was looking for, excellent job. This looks like a very strong entry (still have lots more to read though).
reading this, i almost couldn't help but imagine the music. I envision a back-and-forth, almost battle between a soft, sweet classical guitar (and/or piano) and a more distorted, heavy electric sound. A very soft melodic intro and first verse, with a little touch of a distorted electric guitar as the chorus begins, and then a heavy riff that begins with the word "bombs" (preceeded by a momentary rest, for a bit of tension)... this clash of styles could continue through the rest of the piece and i believe it would be highly effective. sounds like a solid song to me. Thanks for the entry, i really appreciate it. -
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Spot On
You have read my Lyrics to near perfection, Yes that is exactly how the intro would be on the first verse leading up to the Chorus, and heavy riffs on electric guitar overlapping.
Thanks for reading and giving the Lyrics your full attention I appreciate it when anyone can look at my work, and grasp the sounds / tempo and feelings of the piece. Which you have done perfectly.
Thanks again.
All the best,
~T.S~
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BOOM! Explosion of talent.
I was kinda hoping the bombs would explod! Oh well it was a great [song] anyhow. Good write.
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LOL
Thanks again, I was kinda hoping that they never explode. But thy way this planet TICKS you never no what could happen.
All the best
~T.S~
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Great
Great work. However, we are is we're contracted, not were. You left out the apostrophe. (big deal, right?) But I liked the song. Walt.
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Thanks Walt, Glad you like it, It's always worth pointing my errors out to me mate. I tend to forget otherwise.
Thanks again.
All the best
~T.S~
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Hey, cool song here...
I sang it, so I know it works just fine!
You have a way of writing lyrics that makes me appreciate your talent, and I hope you write lots more! 
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Thanks for reading and having a sing along with the Lyrics...
Yeah I like the occasional Lyric here and there!!
Thanks again
~T.S~
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