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The Garden


the garden
you kept so well
over-grown and strangled
the movement
of my heart












Andrew Hide
20-09-2007

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  • Billbard silver member
    September 20, 2007

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    Excellent

    You are a master of the Tanka.Always an interesting and intriguing read.Thanks muchly for your comments on some of my recent poetic endeavors.Bill


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    September 20, 2007

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    A lovely tanka! Very touching. Nice pivot in L3. In L3, is it a typo - overgrow instead of overgrown? I like how this resonates and many folks will be connecting with this so easily.

    All the best,
    Charishma


  • Emerald13
    September 20, 2007

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    I love that pivot ... like the well placed word ... the piece is so sad ... and to imagine a heart overgrown is as if there is so much love, bursting, blooming yet, like gardens, without being tended it begins to strangle itself ...

    yum ... wonderful piece ... (I keep wanting to read over-growN) ... i cant tell you how fabulous it is to read you again ... dontchadarestop >>> Gina