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Dangerously in Love

Every morning I get a new life
and my life  centres on you.
My steadfast eyes remain fixed on you.
When our eyes meet I tell you
how dangerously I am in love with you.

In the afternoon when you leave
I bid you farewell with an insatiate mind
if you ever look back
you will find out
how dangerously I am in love with you.

Every night before I sleep
I wish to die
because like Tristan I have drunk
the love potion.
And without death there is no other way
but to remain dangerously in love with you.








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"Much Love & Many Blessings Joy"
Tristan: A medieval lover knight

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  • okadadokie
    July 15
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    Really super cute. Thanks for the write. Good luck.

    ~Oka


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    January 8, 2008

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    Very well penned. Thank you ever so much for entering my contest this poem was an interesting read. I wish you much luck in my contest. keep up the good writing. xXx


  • poetryality silver member
    October 5, 2007

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    I think you may have your characters confused. Tristan died by the sword. Romeo drank the potion. Love is love until the end. The best to you in this contest.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • HeavenonEarth
    October 5, 2007
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    Hi there Preliminary commenting and I have someone here that is helping me to judge. This was a nice poem and I thank you for entering my contest. Such a sad love story Tristan & Isolde. All the best in the contest
    Blessings~
    ~Joy

  • HeavenonEarth
    September 25, 2007

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    Thank you so much for entering the contest and I will reserve my right to comment in more detail later. I would also like to Thank you for remembering the rules


  • Shapla
    September 25, 2007

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    "In the afternoon when you leave
    I bid you farewell with you an insatiate mind
    if you ever look back
    you will find out
    how dangerously I am in love with you."

    No words to say how beautifully u penned the emotion bhaiaa. This stanza actually touched me so much that it brought tears, otherwise the entire piece is well written.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    I adore the voice here...so clear and omnipresent.
    Powerful devotion expressed with poetic talent.
    Blue

  • Leaving Today
    September 21, 2007

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    Your muse really reached its peak great poem, coming out one after another.....good job, well done


  • Romily
    September 20, 2007
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    I love the last stanza......well written.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 20, 2007

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    Your words are very powerful and passionate and you express love from the heart very well. I enjoyed reading this.

    All the best in the contest

    Sue


  • Nil Pori
    September 19, 2007

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    oaw, it's a touchy,passionate poem.I like it,mostly the last two lines:
    "And without death there is no other way
    but to remain dangerously in love with you."

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